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Love is my vivid emotion

Forever Onward

Real Gentlemen Of Time

Tell Examples Never Lived

Of Vivid Emotion

Hindering Us Romantics To Suffer

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  • drumdog79
    March 20, 2008

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    Thanks for entering this tricky contest. I really like you entry. If I may make one suggestion though; the last line...I'm not sure if one can "hinder someone to suffer". A hinderance can cause one to suffer, but the wording seems a little off. I know it's hard to find the right word when you're forced into the structure of an acrostic poem. Maybe changing Hindering to Helping or change "To suffer" to "TOO Severely" would make more sense. But it's not nessessary if you don't want to. However, you did miss the really tricky part of the contest completely. The first letter of every word in the interior phrase (in this case "Love Forgotten Hurts") is also supposed to spell something. That's what makes the contest so challenging. I'll use my poem as an example. The first letter of every word in the overall poem spells "weapons annihilate rapdily" but the first letter of those 3 words spells "war". To the best of my knowledge, "Love Forgotten Hurts" doesn't spell anything but LFH. I don't mean to be harsh or cruel, I really do like this piece as a regular acrostic. The words fit the acronym beautifuly.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    March 20, 2008
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    Nice interesting contest for sure. A great example of the form. Good luck