Jumping in circles
Twirling in the pouring rain
Locked in a tight embrace
Deep into his soul
Through his eyes I gaze
Taking me to such an amazing place
His arms encompass me
all that i am
feverishly
yet tenderly
his hands search me
As if looking for a key
To a treasure i have no mind.
Those eyes, dark,
entrancing.
Pulling me in
My desire,screams
His touch
Sending shivers down my spine
His hand cups,
the small in my back.
Tasting me,
with those full lips.
Devouring my,
Innocence.
From the Streets,
To the Sheets,
Tossing and turning.
Silent screams
Of Ecstacy.
Heavy Beating Breath,
Body's glistening,
Legs intertwined,
Until My nails dig deep
Into his Flesh as we grind.
Back arches,
Pulling him tight
Sweet Release.
Cuddles and Sweet Kisses,
Until tomorrow Night.
In a list
A contest entry
- Romantic Poetry * picture inspired by ennovy.
700 points, ended June 27, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Just Plain Dirty by Funluvingrl16.
1050 points, ended August 6, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thoughts?
Comments
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Tonight
a very good write--you paint a picture in the readers mind--showing a lot of talent.
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No, i dont like it. its to boring. as i stated in the rules i dont want and of this: he touched her gingerly on the shoulder, and im sorry to say this but this "poem" is the number one example of this mistake.
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OMFG!
I absolutely loved your poem! It had me following along till the very last line, the way you built up the anticipation as the poem progressed. excellent! keep up the good work!
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I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Thank you for your time and comment.
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OMG this made me Hawt
i think i need some me time now 
i loooved the buildup an playfulness that leads to, erm, other things 
an how it all explodes at the end. Lovely
Heavy Beating Breath,
Body's glistening,
Legs intertwined,
Until My nails dig deep
Into his Flesh as we grind.
WoWz
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Hehe
Glad you liked it.=]
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Thank you for your beautifully penned entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Thankies.
Hope you liked it.
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You have a way with words and showing your readers what you see. Wonderfully done!
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Thank you
I'm glad you liked it.
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aww this is a REALLY well penned poem,
i love the sensuality and mature love,
in this poem, i really do love this,
all my love,
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Aw
Thank you. ^^ I'm glad you liked it.
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Beautifully written.
It makes me feel very spiritualistic...
I like the way this is wrote too. -
Innocent
The ending is beautiful. Describes the romance and subtlety of love more than a sexual encounter; sweet.
"His hand cups,
the small in my back.
Tasting me,
with those full lips.
Devouring my,
Innocence."
The innocence of but one, that I still dream of taking; such beautiful writing. This poem touches my heart because it is so real and something I live for. Awesome writing; 8/10!
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A build up of wanton desire until the end. Thanks for entering, and good luck in the contest.
Novy & Brazos -
Nicely done & unique...thank you for entering our contest...
novy & Brazos
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great!!!
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Great write for someone your age. Keep up the great work. really painted a picture
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Sensual
You started innocently and ended seductively...great write. I was taken away in the moment and left breathless at the end.
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Very dreamy, seductive and romantic, thanks to the choice of wording and the flow of the piece. Tht temperature rises within the piece, leaving the reader a bit breathless at the end and has the reader themselves looking forward to "tomorrow Night".
Good write.
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Awesome!
You really wowed me! This is dripping with sensuality.
If this was a real experience, it would be quite breathtaking. Peace.
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This was amazing. You had that cute and innocent feeling at the beginning and it turned into disguised sexiness. i like it alot
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Wow, good imagery. Nice and sweet, and not innapropriate for my young mind, but yet there was a great romantic feel. Impressive!
Congratulations! You are the first peep today that I give applauses! Yay!
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