I want you dead
I want you to die
I want you to pay
For every time you made me cry
I want to take your heart
Rip it in two
You can't even imagine
The horrible things I can do
It won't be physical
I'll just fuck with your head
I've learned from the master
From all the things you've said
It's going to be different
This time around
I'm stronger now
No longer bound
A contest entry
- Screw the Invite Contests (Anything) by ShadedRequiem.
300 points, ended April 15, 2008, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything && Everything. by Antebellum.
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Comments
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I really like the rhyme you have working here, and the form its written in.
thanks for entering,
good luck. -
...After the contest comments I made on your poems, I had to stop by your page and check out some of your other work.
I have to say, this is more the sort of thing I was looking for in my contest. I mean, the placement of the f-bomb in stanza 4 is perfect! The rhyme is still a little funky, but that's probably me talking from the perspective of someone who dislikes rhyme anyway... So yeah, not bad. Anyway, I hope you enter again.
Laura
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This is awesome. I love revenge poems. I think it's because I'll actually do some of these things. I like how much raw feeling is put into this poem. It drips with hate and anger. Great write. Alyssa
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i love it...and i know what you mean, in the end even though you went through all that bullcrap you do come out stronger. good job.
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