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Forsaken

The wind is blowing and the trees will bend,
Within a force of nature they sway,
Leaves are falling like a final breath
They stick to my window panes,
Watching from inside this tomb I presume to be safe,
Clouds are rolling…
So black and malicious,
The sky becomes a mirror reflecting my life's face,
I see in the maelstrom a kindred reminder…
Of all the years that have passed away ;

My heart swims in the overcast,
My soul is heavy,
There are tears in the forecast,
In those smiling moments that never last,
Mirror mirror...well never mind
I have stopped bothering to ask,
How you forget those melodies from your past,
Becoming layers of memories that fade so fast,
On the outside you have stood the test of time
What a laugh,
Dressed in the warm colors of the possibilities you had,
You understand the question,
How could anyone be so beautiful and so sad ;

To believe I am forsaken,
A haunted dreamer I cannot awaken,
The days moves faster as your momentum slows down,
The waves rise higher and higher
As you sink into the black,
This sea of time grows deeper
As you struggle not to drown,
The riptide pulls you from the shallows
As you drift out into the cold hard facts,
The dream you would awake to a bright and sunny day…
Was mistaken,
To conceive that I am forsaken

I believe ;

I watch another day unfurl…
Through my window on this world,
I wonder why it seems the rain tends to follow me,
When I close my eyes
The sun begins to shine,
Until I rise
Then the clouds being to cry endlessly,
A little temperamental,
A little paranoid it may be,
But I can only judge the answers I can see ;
 
Inside it is getting colder
As the day grows older,
Soon upon me will fall another night,
Will it be more of the same,
Another move in the game,
Watching shadows dance with the solemn candlelight,
An unspoken word…
Watching the embers burn,
Searching for a perfect phrase
To paint the ashes of this life ;

To believe I am forsaken,
A haunted dreamer I cannot awaken,
The days moves faster as your momentum slows down,
The waves rise higher and higher
As you sink into the black,
This sea of time grows deeper
As you struggle not to drown,
The riptide pulls you from the shallows
As you drift out into the cold hard facts,
The dream you would awake to a bright and sunny day…
Was mistaken,
To conceive that I am forsaken…

I believe ;

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  • warrior-eagle
    April 2, 2008

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    Wow.
    I really liked this
    very very much.
    Amazing job.
    Thanks for entering my contest.

    ..Simply Me♥


  • nitefire
    March 19, 2008

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    I really liked this a lot. It has painted such vivid images in my mind. Very cold and sad. I feel this poem spoke to me of realizations in life. Loosing the magic and luster in life when in the light of reality. I have a lot of sympathy. I have felt myself have felt old from a very young age. I loved these lines,
    "Leaves are falling like a final breath"
    "How you forget those melodies from your past,
    Becoming layers of memories that fade so fast,
    On the outside you have stood the test of time
    What a laugh,
    Dressed in the warm colors of the possibilities you had,"
    "This sea of time grows deeper
    As you struggle not to drown,
    The riptide pulls you from the shallows
    As you drift out into the cold hard facts,"
    Very nicely done. although i feel a little more down now. I have such a propensity for feeling blue I try to steer clear of such hauntingly somber works, For you skill and grace as a poet, I make an exception.
    Leah


    • Redrusty66
      March 20, 2008
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      Thanks so much for the detailed analysis. My grandomother use to call me an "old soul" reffering to my seeming to be so "old" and meloncholy by the age of 5-6 years. I too try to avoid depressing things such as movies or other stimulation as I share the same predisposition as you describe. I do tend to enjoy staying on the "dark" side of verse, it's like an exorcism in a way. Doesn't change the facts but at least it acknowledges them.