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Dead

Souls
within charnel house's
holding the emcumbered dead
profusely howling


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10 words
prompt: MORTUARY

A contest entry

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  • Blooming Poet
    March 23, 2008

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    EWWW, bad thought. great take on mortuary and great use of limited words. You used some pretty vivid words and images in this poem, it tells a lot with a few words.


  • Tattboyspet
    March 20, 2008

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    hmmmm ... enjoyed this one - painted almost a banshee picture here for me
    thank you for your entry


  • LadyDementia gold member
    March 19, 2008

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    Very nice word play, created a wonderfully penned piece. Good luck in the contest with it