Amber eyes brimming with tears,
Glance straight to your heart,
Pleading…
Pointing…
Showing,
the wonders only a kid can see,
But with every sigh
Brings a frown to his face,
Until you begin to see…
The things you've missed.
In a list
A contest entry
- Quote Inspired. [40 words or Less] [III] by Naridill.
400 points, ended March 26, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think and PLEASE be honest
Comments
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Whoa - this is awesome. I like that it lends itself to multiple interpretations.
The last two lines are so succinct, so seemingly simple and yet infused with such power. Nifty read. - NANGALEEMA
(In the fourth from the last line I think you have an unnecessary word: with. Did you mean "every sigh brings a frown to his face"?)
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