Favorable shadows beseech freedom,
while Satan snatches at fleeting souls;
Prostitute smiles encroach on glistening haloes,
Prudent thoughts switch from good to evil.
Bypassing looks of Savage judgement:
Convoluted gasps escort unfeeling stares -
she's used to drinking Bitter pills with sugar water.
Depressed thoughts Erode acceptance of self;
frowns Intransigent by pure will.
Formation of Mulch evident with snide remarks,
made Obvious to all and sundry.
She must Tolerate masked faces
that Unforeseen circumstances have tossed her way -
those Vacuous grins that accompany handshakes
give way to a Vantage point behind her eyes ...
a Waft of approval breezes her way -
like an abstract Apology on the wind
...
beliefs need not be led Astray
there is no need to Betray yourself!
Author notes
I have used all the words in order that you have given:
Favorable, Satan, Prostitute, Prudent, Savage, Convoluted, Bitter, Depressed, Erode, Intransigent, Mulch, Obvious, Tolerate, Unforeseen, Vacuous, Vantage, Waft, Apology, Astray, Betray
No matter what others may say about each person - they should always be true to themselves ... there will ALWAYS be that special soul who will accept them as they are and THAT is true love!
A contest entry
- Yet another word bank by DeadlyPoetic88.
1625 points, ended March 21, 2008, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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okay so I've reread the poem, because I often read these over when they are entries. I caught a small mistake that I'd like you to fix. You've spelt judgment wrong. I don't know why i did not catch it before.
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I loved this poem!!! Beautifully done. It flowed well I found myself wanting to read it. Very good use of the words.
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I loved the lines:
"a Waft of approval breezes her way -
like an abstract Apology on the wind"
That was great writing. You know what to do with word banks doncha? This was an awesome piece of work. I hope you do exceedingly well in this contest. This deserves a trophy in my opinion.
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Wow, making all those words make sense, and in order...that couldnt have been easy ! Great job!
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Very free use of the word bank, laid out in an eye-catching way. Maybe you simply did that to highlight the banked-words, but what you have given us is a thread running through the poem. I hope it does well.
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Absolutely brilliant!
you did a great job at using all of the words from the list and pulled them together into one coherent piece.
Absolutely LOVED the line "she's used to drinking Bitter pills with sugar water."
YLM
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