I bit the dust.
But came up even more alive.
The dirt lodged in my teeth
tasted of failure
with a little spice of hope.
My knees and elbows
were caked brown and red
stinging of regret
but the pain I ignored.
Instead I scraped up my dignity
and realized what I have.
Bruised
is nothing
when you have your life.
Author notes
Bit the dust. An ironic spin on this cliche (I don't know how to get the accent)
A contest entry
- 50-55 words by creationsfromheart.
475 points, ended March 20, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Fix the Ignorance by Dak.
450 points, ended March 25, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
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20000 points, ended June 2, 2008, 946 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - round one (for everyone) prewrite contest ENTER ENTER ENTER (AND YES THAT MEAN'S YOU too by serenity silvermoon.
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Comments
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GOLD, yes indeed
That's the real Spirit.
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Transcend All
Groovy write! I loved the twist of irony! Thanks for sharing your creative soul.
Namaste'
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Ain't that a fact
Sometimes it takes us so long to appreciate life.
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Congrats on the gold!!
So true, a wicked write, very well penned. Congrats on the gold, it was well deserved with this
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Very nice. Yeah; one is always grateful when they realize, "Hey, I'm still alive!" Thank you for sharing. Congrats on the gold trophy.
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Nice job
This is truly a gold great lines all the way through
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BRAVO! BRAVO!
love it and finally a poet who can celebrate their
skinned knee's with me!
I've already instructed my hubbie to upon my burial service, hopefully way distant in the future,
to include with me a new silver shovel, so that I too..
may dig under those pearly gates ....
just in case I have too!
giggle.
well written, and so smartly done!
just loved it! BRAVO! BRAVO!
ears/Seattle
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I really enjoy the metahphorical way of this piece. It can be interpreted in many ways and that makes for a lovely piece of poetry!! Thank you for sharing this with us. Hugs~Nikki
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Congrats on the Gold well deserved! Yes even when we are at our lowest there is still hope as long as we don't give up What a wonderful write thanks for sharing
Theresa
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Exactly.
Now this is what I call a brilliant piece of poetry. It states the way it is and shows that being bloodied does not mean you are out. Congratulations on the gold. -
Congratulations on winning this contest. I enjoyed your write very much, clever and well done.
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SO very true! Excellent thoughts printed here a wonderful write!
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excellent.
sorry not much else to say. =]
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Wow--Very profound and true statement in this one!!
--Best of luck in the contest!!
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