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Wipe Away My Tears

Wipe away my tears my love,
With your gentle hand,
Wipe away my tears my love,
In this blackened land.
Wipe away my tears my love,
A single solemn blue,
Wipe away my tears my love,
So I can start anew.
Wipe away my tears my love,
They're a salty drop,
Wipe away my tears my love,
I'm begging the tide to stop.
Wipe away my tears my love,
My eyes still bright red,
Wipe away my tears my love,
Before I'm truly dead.

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  • Blooming Poet
    March 24, 2008

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    the repatition works very nicely in emphazizing youur point. I love the rhyming, its unique and not forced at all. Love this part:


    Wipe away my tears my love,
    A single solemn blue,
    Wipe away my tears my love,
    So I can start anew.


  • Beauty Of Silence
    March 19, 2008

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    powerful imagery... loved the rhyming of your words... loved the repetition... sometimes.. repetitions get annoying after a while, but you worked this well and that's awesome!

    I see how each line connects and the flow was there... very sad poem! very touching... thank yo for entering... best wishes!

    Ps pls put your option in your AN

    Much love always,
    Ranji


  • poeticweaver gold member
    March 18, 2008

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    Good imagery here, very sad and filled with such sorrow.
    Thanks for sharing, and all the best within the contest!
    Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~