I have a bitter hate
For those who happily betray
And after that they celebrate
For the remainder of the day
But for those such as us
Roads lead to savage, unforeseen events
Make us very depressed
When we have to pay our rents
Oblivious to the outside world
Thos people fight for naught
And though we try hard to tolarate
They make me want to rot
A favorable way to stop
An apology would be good
But those other types people
Do not do what they really should
So never listen to then
They will always lead astray
Make sure to get the better choice
So that your world is not covered in grey
Author notes
Favorable, Savage, Bitter, Depressed, Obvious, Tolerate, Unforeseen, Apology, Astray, Betray
I think it kinda sucks. Sorry peoples.
A contest entry
- Yet another word bank by DeadlyPoetic88.
1625 points, ended March 21, 2008, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Nice use of the words. I've enjoyed this. Sorry if it felt like I rushed you or anything. I don't think it sucked. I've had to read much far worse things than this. But I am sorry If I've rushed you. tolarate this is the wrong spelling of this word. Its spelled tolerate. I must say that the poems rhyme feels a little forced. I think if you work at this poem a little you can better it. You may want to add more imagery to this. The contest is still open and you can always send me a link to your revised poem. I give everyone a fair chance.
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You need to hurry up and enter please or I will be forced to remove you and I do not want to do that.
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