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(untitled...about the ocean)

Repetitive motion
Sparkling lights
I am mesmerized
By all of the sights

The spray hits my face
And the cool breeze blows
The smell of the sea
Wafts through my nose

Gently swaying back and forth
While the waves break beneath me
A pod of dolphins swims on by
Voicing their voices, so squeaky

And then I am tossed overboard
Sinking faster than ever
I open my eyes and see
Blue, and blue forever

Eventually I hit the bottom
And then I look around
The fish have been quite startled
By the crash and the sound

I am quite scared for my life
For I have sunk so deep
I try to take a breath
And breathe it in with ease

I smile and laugh to myself
As I look to the sky
Somewhere above there is land
I lift my hand and wave goodbye

For the remainder of my life
I am at the bottom of the sea
Swimming amongst the ocean's greatest
Living life the way it should be


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I'm 13....yeah....

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  • Desire gold member
    March 20, 2008
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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: (untitled...about the ocean)
    Oh My what a Journey you took us on and we were wanting more and more
    and under the ocean too

    This is the third time I traveled from Earth to somewhere special
    Wow!!
    Feels like you had a ton of FUN and Oh I imagine lots of people wanting to take this kind of trip~~
    The ocean harbors so many Wonderful secrets and Thank You for sharing them with us

    These lines tickled us with smiles~
    Gently swaying back and forth
    While the waves break beneath me
    A pod of dolphins swims on by
    Voicing their voices, so squeaky

    Fantastic piece You have created~
    We are Impressed for You are 13 Years old
    and made an Awesome Tour Guide

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet One
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire&Cheetahliou~*~


    • jbbrandi
      March 20, 2008
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      I'm so glad that you liked it! And thanks for the awesome comment!