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You Take My Breath Away

I love the sparkle in your eyes.
I love the smile upon your face.
Baby, I just melt,
At the thought of your embrace.
I'd love to wake up in your arms
Each and every day.
Darlin’, what I’m sayin’,
Is you take my breath away.

You take my breath away.
You always make me smile.
I haven’t felt this way
In such a long, long while.
I see your face, my knees grow weak
Your love, girl, makes my day.
Every time I see you, you take my breath away.

The sweet sound of your voice.
The tenderness of your touch.
The awesome smell of your perfume.
I love you oh, so much.
I love to listen to everything
That you have to say.
Babe, I really mean it
You take my breath away.

You take my breath away.
You always make me smile.
I haven’t felt this way
In such a long, long while.
I see your face, my knees grow weak
Your love, girl, makes my day.
Every time I see you, you take my breath away.

There has never been another
To make me feel the way you do.
I have to pinch myself
So I will know it is true.
How did I get so lucky?
I hope this feeling will stay.
Always and forever
You’ll take my breath away.

You take my breath away.
You always make me smile.
I haven’t felt this way
In such a long, long while.
I see your face, my knees grow weak
Your love, girl, makes my day.
Every time I see you, you take my breath away.


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May 31st...Happy Birthday!!!

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  • BluesMan gold member
    July 16, 2008
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    This is an awsome song The rhyme was nearly flawless and the sentament had me swooning Thank you for entering my contest

  • Poemdancer
    July 14, 2008

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    Beautifully written. Excellent rhyming it flows easily and naturally. Great job, good luck in the contest!


  • MikeNoxaura
    July 14, 2008
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    lyrcal!

    Very nice, would make a good song


  • wondering.willow
    June 7, 2008

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    oh what a sweet poem.
    any girl would fall in love with this!
    its the ultimate complement!
    great job & good luck!

    ♥aj


  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    June 6, 2008

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    I love the repeated chorus...

    ...this is happy song and the repeated chorus emphasises the important message you deliver. I can almost hear the music as it sings its way through the sweet words. I like it a lot.


  • tawk gold member
    June 6, 2008

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    What a wonderful and heartfelt song! Wonderful imagery and emotion. I could almost hear the music playing along. Good luck in the contest Theresa


  • ladame
    May 19, 2008

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    Adorable song. A sweet write, and I can relate to it too, even if the cliches are sometimes twee.

    Ahem, author notes...

    Thanks for entering.


  • Angelflower
    May 9, 2008

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    This was really sweet and cute.. For some unknown reason the fact that you repeated the last stanza a couple times bothered me just a little.. like it was over used a little bit.. BUT you did a really good job on expressing how this woman makes you feel and thats great! I really liked this.. well done.. and best of luck!

    Angel :

  • EmeraldDaze
    May 5, 2008
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    I like this poem, though you use a few cliches they seem to work. Thanks for entering.


  • EmmaLuLu
    April 26, 2008
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    great


  • Sorath
    April 16, 2008

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    Aw this was really sweet!! I loved the rhyme which was very simular to my own rhyming style. Thanks for the entry!!


  • Entwining Beauty
    April 14, 2008

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    This is just beauty And very loving.

    please can you say how you would like to be in my family please


  • Midgetbridgey
    April 13, 2008
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    goodluck!


  • MartaJay
    April 9, 2008

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    BINGO! I found what i was looking for!!!!!! Excellent job! Great feeling of the poem, beautiful flow! BRAVO BRAVO


  • Jack22
    April 7, 2008

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    This poem is very good, i can actually FEEL the emotion you put into it.. i also like the way it seems like a song... it was an awsome entry and I wish you the best of luck!!!

    Jack


  • hardcorevash
    March 28, 2008

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    Awesome!

    I love it.
    It makes so much sense,
    Especially when someone
    comes to mind as you read this poem.

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