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A Paradox.

And we wished

to be all that she is...

But what the eye

tells is in reality

a paradox

of abstract laughter

that hides her sorrow.

In a list

A contest entry

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  • phoenixonfire
    March 23

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    Amazing! This had me totally wow it!! Excellent write...and the paradox word is very impactful!

    thanks for entering and good luck!

    luv
    pri

  • Sagerider gold member
    March 19

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    I Love it.

    It puts me in mind of one of my favorite poems, Richard Cory by Edward Arlington Robinson. Shorter but just as well written. You amaze me.
    Del


  • Akimbo silver member
    March 19
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    I like this.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    March 18
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    Such magic well written.


  • FransB silver member
    March 18

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    Great use of words here with sadness. Would we be just as sad if we were in her shoes or is it easier to be as smilly as she pretends to be? That is the question and you have me thinking ... I'd rather be me!! Good luck. Frans


  • Celtic Legend
    March 18
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    very strong meaning great job!

  • poeticweaver gold member
    March 18
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    Well Done,

    How I try to hide my sorrow with smiles,
    don't always go as planned, but hey, I try.. LOL.. << See! Thanks for sharing here, and all the best in the contest. Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~


  • Cannonsfire silver member
    March 18

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    We all hide at some stage, you describe the secret of a mask over a face quite well. Love, C P.S But I always see your real face and the emotions, thats why you are such a dear friend.

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