Twisted knots of fear within,
this cramped and foetal frame.
Flesh is ripe for cutting now,
as demons call my name.
A single tear is all that comes,
there must be more to feel.
Why must it always come to this?
As blood and thoughts congeal.
Cigarettes with embers bright,
goose-pimpled blistered skin.
Fighting off delusion’s grasp,
and surfaced thoughts within.
Illusions born in fantasy,
cascade inside my mind.
Why do I blind myself to truth?
And all delusions find.
Shattered dreams and splintered mind,
with thoughts all left unspoken.
Suppressed inside, alone, denied,
discarded toy so broken.
Emotions numb in blackest void,
fragmented shards of pain.
Despair, the rising demon songs,
that dance within my brain.
Author notes
DARK...
Just felt better writing it.
In a list
A contest entry
- Moving Past The Pain-♥ by Bruised.Roses.
525 points, ended August 5, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A contest reguarding self-harm. by AutumnsFlame.
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900 points, ended March 1, 47 entries
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Comments
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I can't imagine what that must be like.
I have to congratulate you. It takes so much courage to share something so deeply personal and dark. Your writing never ceases to amaze me, with its emblazoned imagery from start to finish.
Don
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great poetry
"Emotions numb in blackest void"
love this part
thanks for the entry...
enter this group
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Wow. I really enjoyed reading this. Well done.
Thank you for entering my contest and best of luck to you.
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I really like this. You avoided the cliches well, and it's an eloquent piece. The rhyming, however, felt a little restrictive to me. But it is a really good piece. thanks for entering!
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I thought the imagery you put into this was absolutely beautiful! I also love the fact that this wasn't cliche at all! There's no flaws in this poem as far as I can see. Thank you for entering my contest.
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this poem is fantastic!
i can totally relate to the thoughts and emotions that are all wrapped up inside this poem
very good work
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I enjoyed this write, especially this bit of imagery: "Illusions born in fantasy,
cascade inside my mind." but I which this bit was more complete, cascade from where? and what are these illusions? what are their unique qualities that separate them from the illusions of others? I would have loved to see more done with this bit, but I enjoyed the write anyway.
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this is great work with fab imagery lol welldone and good luck
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Aweseome. Love it. Great work. This is a really emotional peice. Thank you for entering.
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Okay.... Suicide blonde asked me to help judge... dark - twisted poetry... is she nuts... I hate that kind of peotry unless its REALLY good ~ Well guess what!???
You've done it ~ I loved it ~ wow... to get my vote you gotta be good ~ woot ~ nice freaking job!
Good luck in the contest ~
Florida Sunshine ~
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'Suppressed inside, alone, denied,
discarded toy so broken.
Emotions numb in blackest void,
fragmented shards of pain.
Despair, the rising demon songs,
that dance within my brain.'
Wow, this piece is dark and I can feel the emotions venting through your words and to be able to do that as a poet is a remarkable talent.
Thankyou for entering, and good luck in the contest
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This was really good. I liked it alot. I could definately relate to this piece. Thank you so much for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
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I love this! Such intense emotions! The rhythm is fantastic, stunning work hun as usual! Another I know I'll be revisiting often! Congrats on the HM
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I should have known you can't hide your writing!
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I understand
I don't like it. Being bipolar is bad enoough. Good work -
this was an AMAZING poem very deep I can relate so much however i muct ask you to remove this picture as this contest focuses on recovery from this kind of stuff and this photo is triggering and I would not want to see any one harm themselves....I thank you for your cooperation and your entry good luck in the contest
xox
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Thank you & no probs, I've just taken down the image...
Cheers,
Fritz........
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WOW this is actually the best Poem i've seen. it is sooo... deep something i can relate to. thanks for the pleasure of reading this poem
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wow
it's amazing so darkly beautiful and so sadly true for many including myself, take care,
SchizoAngelDying xx
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Honest
I've had some of these thoughts before myself. It shows some courage and is also a nice collection of words. Nice one.
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wow
wow this was ver powerful
A single tear is all that comes,
there must be more to feel.
Why must it always come to this?
As blood and thoughts congeal.
i really like this. there has to be somthing more but alas at most times there is not. and u must learn to live with the pain -
Great work. Intenese emotional atmosphere was created by the excellent use of wordplay. Held my interest throughout and provided ample room for personal interpretation and perspective. Thanks for the great read.
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I feel a kind of sad longing coming from this, very powerful and deep. The imagery is darkly stunning and gorgeous. I couldn't pick a favourite line if I tried. Simply superb poem, flows effortlessly. I love it
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I can feel the emotion
in ever well placed line-
its raw and its real
And I am moved!
Thank you for sharing!
~Pastel
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