Eloquence withers
frozen in sorrows
beauty outlasts
[in inanimate objects]
Playing the violin
[across my neck]
a musical genius
as the blood applauds
but I have a heart
and darling I do die.
Author notes
prompt:'They slit our throats
Like we were flowers'
-MM-
pic credit:By Celine... on Flickr
40words or less.
A contest entry
- The Painful Side Of Love by Blooming Poet.
575 points, ended March 28, 2008, 38 entries
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WOWZERS that was like woahhhhh the ending sent me chills lol very well done on this one to !
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Congrats on the gold
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wow - impressed with the calm but deadly feel here. It's hard to explain but the words slice smoothly but deeply.
Thanks for entering,
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This is good, but it seems a little rushed and forced in parts. Beautiful picture and amazing prompt take. Thanks for sharing. I like this part:
Eloquence withers
frozen in sorrows
beauty outlasts
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Wow, very poignant my dear, nice diction as well. Best of luck in the contest.
Love and peace,
mj.
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Oh My!!
Oh Honey~ Please
You talked about mine this is Fantastic
Powerful imagery and emotions~
Love this!!
and the last line for it grabs by the throat~~
Oy~~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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I so like your poetry, i simply can't get enough of it ^^
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