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Hobbled Hurt

Gurgling murmurs squirm
    hurt
bursting and bleeding
I learn.

"So sad, but sexy..."
her whisper slices the silence.

    (acid burns to reply)

Now a mute momento
eyes opened
    hope
renewed to periscope
I turn.

    (The door closes)

Alone, on display.


Author notes

Quote inspired:

'They slit our throats
Like we were flowers'
-MM-

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  • Naridill
    March 24, 2008

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    Different. The end half is intriguing and well penned. From the start being slow - the end has such a strong effect, which brilliant phrasing and imagery.

    Thanks for entering,