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Tequilas sipped by the moonlight;
drunken giggles linger tonight.
As seductive motives ignite
they yearn delight, they yearn delight.
Bittersweet kisses soon caress
while moistened lips had quite compress-
in longing whispers they confess
of sweet progress, of sweet progress.
Lovers fall gravely in passion
from luscious depths, faces ashen.
To risk the lustful emotion:
the sensation, the sensation.
Doubts revolve around twisted minds,
this veiled, vague moment intertwines;
desire and regret combines-
false love reminds, false love reminds . . .
~~~
Author notes
My first sensual piece so yeah, take it easy on me >.>
I don't like writing this kind but I might as well
challenge myself XD
I'm not 14. I am turning 16 in a few months.
only reason I am 14 here is because
I could get banned of changing my age again >.<
I changed my age before for good reasons, fyi.
Anyway, the form here is a Monotetra.
From Shadowpoetry:
The monotetra is a new poetic form developed by Michael Walker.
Each stanza contains four lines in monorhyme.
Each line is in tetrameter (four metrical feet) for a total of eight syllables.
What makes the monotetra so powerful as a poetic form, is that the last line contains two metrical feet, repeated.
It can have as few as one or two stanzas, or as many as desired.
Stanza Structure:
Line 1: 8 syllables; A1
Line 2: 8 syllables; A2
Line 3: 8 syllables; A3
Line 4: 4 syllables, repeated; A4, A4
That's all. Comments are appreciated =]
P.S. sorry if the last stanza seems weird ^^'
A contest entry
- Monotetra Form by Seeking Peace.
1100 points, ended March 31, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me any kind of love you want by ApocalypseAngel.
450 points, ended June 27, 2008, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think will make this poem better
Comments
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lovely rhyme and a perfect length
i like the repeated phrases in the last line of each stanza
thanks for entering and good luck -
wow!!
wow!! very very descriptive and great words!! good luck in the contest!!!!!
i loved this poem very much. and i think that the last stanza is very very pretty and not weird at all!! i love the ending!!
SilverWolf
*hoooowlll*
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wow this is really sensula indeed.. and for your first attempt you did extremely well.. great job!
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Wow..you used so many descriptive words, it's beautiful! The last stanza is my favorite part actually. "Desire and regret combines-" It says soo much. And I love the repetition at the end of each stanza..it just ties everything together nicely.
Great job & keep writing!!
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wow..this poem is great i loved it..i dont have much 2 say about it b/c its that great..gud job..n lolz..y did u change ur age so many times =p lolz
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I don't think the last stanza is weird at all.. I think it tells of story of passion that has been flamed and indulged.. only to find it is a flase love in the end.
Well done!
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There is so much in this post the senusal night of hope as love unfolds
to the ending of 'flase love' ... how many have walked that path in life or have yet to take the journey. It is good that you challenged yourself and expanded the experience into this format....one of my favourite format thanks to Poetic Whisperer. Nicely penned. Good luck in the contest.
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