What I long to do, before the final bell,
is pen a perfect poem--or if not that,
at least a poem that is remembered well
by fellow rhymers in this noble art
of laying bare the wide world's pain
and probing it with poet's heart.
If I could leave behind just one full thought
of wisdom or reflection on this life,
and if that poem was something like well-wrought,
I would leave this earth contented and at peace,
knowing I had satisfied my hunger;
that my search for love and art could henceforth cease.
Each day I feel the impulse growing stronger:
I'll wield my pen and put it off no longer.
A contest entry
- Ten Thousand Points of Rhyme - The Invitational! Named Poets Only by cricketjeff.
6500 points, ended April 4, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Well done, Poet! And what wonderful gems you desire to leave behind in this life, for this world.
Your little gem speaks volumes and I pray it comes true. I know it will.
Best to you in the contest!
Kelly
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Brill
The longing and urgency are palpable, in this well penned little gem. Your intellect is showing! (and that is a wonderful thing). You have a fine command of the language- brilliant form and you string lovely words together in such an artful manner as to create a vivid tapestry- a deeelish dish for the tongue. Your poems come to life when read aloud- I love that.
Good stuff, mate!
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A beautifully penned piece. We all strive for writing that one piece that will be remembered by all. A lovely poem. Good luck in the contest and happy easter
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Ahh that elusive piece that we all search for.Yet were we to find it then what, our joy in writing poetry would be over For how do you improve on perfection. It is the struggle to improve I think is what drives up onward. Though i do think you are getting close .
A fine poem that speaks to the reader
Excellent good luck in the contest
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Ah.
Immortal beauty penned in mere words ...
you may forget my name
my friend
do not forget my heart
for maybe it shall flame
some joy
when I depart
[Of course the meaning differs for friend and foe!]
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Yes brother. Another one from the mind of a poet. Excellently execute. Wonderful content, scheme, idea. Write on, my friend. One.
Dez
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The title is a clear introduction to the poem. The Poet writes with a smooth, uncompromized lilt and rhyme which has a naturalness. The Poet's voice resonates from the page with the firmly felt intention to leave before the final bell a poem that is thought of well. Well done.
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Is there such a thing as the perfect poem? Different styles and form appeal to some and not others, but I find yours very appealing. Carry on the good work.
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Nifty!
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