Breath-taking

Walking along the sandy beach,
the cool summer breeze passes through my hair.
As I watch the sunset,
along the horizon I see breathtaking colors.
Pinks, blues, and purples,
take my breath away.

Water brushes across my feet,

sand seeps between my toes.

This is my never ending dream you see,

it's peaceful and quiet,

no one here but me.

Wondering along the beach side,

I think to myself,

Does this every have to end?

A contest entry

Without the words by Envelope. 4200 points, ended April 3, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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Envelope
March 18, 2008

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hmm, the most I can say is average. Not to say this is a bad piece, far from it, you exhibit beauty, and control in your imagery. However, regardless of the talent you obviosuly have, the settin and scope of this were menial, the beach and sunset, whether it is in a dream or a thought was far from unexpected. It was more of the same old same old. Thanks alot for taking the time to enter, and good luck In the contest
BuriedTreasures
March 18, 2008

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A nice composition with good flow of verse containing a lot of imagery! Well Done!
Best of luck in the contest!
Starz of Heaven
March 18, 2008

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Oh sweety I love this you did a great job with this poem goodluck to you in the contest darling much love always