So they said you've gone a little crazy,
Always dressed in black and solemn smiles,
In a corner rocking in your dazes,
You always were such a melancholy child,
You spend the nights with your private phantom sages,
Contemplating all the secret places in your mind,
Pontificating the wages of pushing up daisies,
Where ever you get off it was one hell of a ride,
Right?
Your looking in my eyes yet you see right through me,
Talking to a shadow with a friendlier face?
You speak of love and kindness,
Of trusting blindness,
Scribbling your holy scripture on another empty page,
It was all too much to keep on believing...
You could find what you needed in a world full of pain,
So you drifted deeper into the absinthe ether
Of dreams much prettier than staying sane,
I got it ;
To the left it's dreamers and deceivers,
To the right it's candy you can't have,
Straight ahead is all you ever wanted,
Far behind lies the innocence you had,
Standing still in the middle of the road,
Spinning circles whichever way you go,
Cultivating answers from the seeds you sow,
When the roots take hold
Only questions sprout and grow,
Blinded by the static,
The world's a carnival show,
If you finally see the big picture,
Try to let me know ;
Shut your mouth before you drowned in the hope,
You ride a sea of promises floating on their dope,
Feel those lying smiling sharks
Always nipping at your toes,
Can you make it through the night?
Shut your eyes to the overflow ;
Be careful where you tread
When your running from the noises,
Hungry for the peace in shelter from the storm,
Come sleep within my wings...
Sing those sweet tasting voices,
Lost forever more in the warmth of this void,
Shaking ecstasy within the winds of your sadness,
I'll leave you to your necessary self protective choice,
Smiling through the colors of delusion in your madness,
Finally quiet and safe
Slowly rocking back and forth :
Author notes
Option 4) Mental disorders.
Option 4 : Inspired by this picture
http://www.bsimple.com/Inspiration.JPG
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Amazing details!
The descriptions were fascinating.
I felt that this did have a very lyrical quality to it, a musical lilt, so to speak. You are obviously a musician of some sort, as your natural rhythm shines through in your words.
I absolutely loved this. It kept me glued to the screen, excited to read whatever was on the next line (quite a feat, since I'm exhausted after work and school all day and this about the twentieth poem I've read tonight).
Brilliant and enlightening.
I love "into the absinthe ether", and many other parts.
Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Thanks very much for the time and comment. Always a thrill when someone finds something in my words worthy of comment. I humbly blush. I have been in bands all my life and have written lyrical poetry since about age 12. My pieces are always written with music and musicians in mind. Thanks again, it really does mean a lot to me.
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You know.
I believe that this one did come in and describe what the person is seeing and where they are when Alzheimers strikes. I think this is a splendid example of that. -
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Thanks ever so much, mental illness be it actual mental disease or psychological based are so devastating in so many ways and on so many levels. I am thrilled you found worth in this piece and value the feedback greatly.
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"Cultivating answers from the seeds you sow,
When the roots take hold
Only questions sprout and grow,"
Whoa. Words cannot describe how awesome I think this piece is. I wasn't sure what people would get from that picture...you've created a wonderfully dark piece of poetry that I enjoyed very much. The flow was great, imagery amazing, everything was great. Thanks a lot for the entry, Good luck! -
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Thanks very much for the time and comment. Always a thrill when someone finds something in my words worthy of comment.
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a good dark piece of poetry penned here, well i say poetry, i was thinking more musical as i read along, more like a song
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Thanks much for your time, and yes , I write lyrical poetry meant for musicians so you were right on the money on that note. Thanks again.
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Thanks much for you time, always appreciated.
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very nice write. thank you for entering my contest and best of luck to you hun.
~Angelic Princess~
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