in the cold December wind
i wasn't sure if i heard you
but you took it to heart
and wrapped your arms around me
called me your girl
because i love you so much
i let myself believe
when it was my fault
and i did everything i could
to make you love me again
falling for you was like
falling from a cloud and
after ripping every nerve
it hurt when i finally landed
and you took your hand away
this time i knew that you
were someone i couldn't believe
someone i wanted to trust so much
that when the tears finally came
you weren't there to wipe them away
the empty promises you made were true
i never wanted to believe in love
i couldn't stand to let you know
that my walls stood tall
and my heart was shattering in your eyes
don't believe me when i say
that i don't miss you
that i don't love you
because when you were there
all my heart would rejoice for you
Author notes
he was my everything
i'm pretty sure he still is.
this is very hard.
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Comments
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this is great i know how this feels thanx for entering my contest and thanx for the great write=]
btw you should edit the "i" -
This is pretty sad and almost reads like a letter never sent. Well written.
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When I first read, I thought maybe the piece was too wordy. Then I read it again. And again. And I decided maybe my initial reaction was wrong. I do think some parts are a bit imprecise - I have yet to figure out whether I think that works with the muddled-ness of feelings behind the piece or not.
At any rate, I just wanted to say...I've been there, done that, in the past few months. I admire the fact that you're able to write about it, and I do believe the piece as a whole portrays fairly well the pain that such a disappointment elicits. Best of luck to you - in love, in life, and in this contest.
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its takes a while to heal when you revolve your world around someone like that; but believe me.. when the time is right you'll know that you've built yourself up again and he'll only be a faded memory of what you had. keep your chin up hun
♥
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