I seen the all the truths in your lies,
Watching your espressions as you speak.
What troubles my dying heart the most,
Is it worth all my very painful agony?
I couldn't give you away like you want,
Seeing you parade out my loving arms.
Yet your infidelities have cause pain,
You pass the cross bating my true love.
I feel the tighting of a hangman's noose,
Strangling the last few breaths from me.
Knowing once you leave my love behind,
There will be no coming back for me.
{Like Jim Croce sings," Cause baby I can't
hang upon no lovers cross for you"}
Author notes
"Cause baby, I can't hang upon no lovers cross for you"
Lover Cross, Jim Croce
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Comments
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I liked this a lot!
My favorite lines were
Knowing once you leave my love behind,
There will be no coming back for me.
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This is wonderful michele an excellent take on the prompt All the best in the contest
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Nice job. I like the sincerity in your poetry.
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Bravo
A splendid take on the prompt tht would make Jim Croce very proud.
Power-packed with raw emotions...
The second stanza tugs hard at the heart and soul.
I love the methoric use in the final stanza as well.
A hangmans noose to represent the pain and smothering that one feels as being a marytr tied to a lover's cross.
You have amazing talent!
WELL PENNED!
Thank you for your entry and I wish you the very best in the contest.
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