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Child Within

I close my eyes 
and there I see ...
this thirteen year old
this girl
this ... [me]

With winding limbs
scar covered frown
Perched upon a hill
scared to be found

[NO]  [NO]  [NO]
Was all he heard
Grandpa don't
the distant blur

Tears soaking through
the canvas of her face
his pounded screams
her black and blue face

                          [HIS]
                Secrets to be kept
                          [HIS]
            Threats which ever grew                                 
      her body wept ... her body knew


                          [she]
                Clicked her heels
                she prayed to thee
  I wanna go home ... I wanna be free 
                                         
                          [Now]                 
                  Cold and distant
          the history of her and me
                    child within
            her desire to be free
                                         
                  I close my eyes
                      there I see
                this thirteen year old
                          this girl
                        this ...[me]
                                                                                                                                                                                                           
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  • funpum
    January 15

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    This must have been hard to write. I'm so sorry, and hope you have fond some way to deal with what this has cost you. I'm sure too that writing it out must help.

    I've found that I can write about animals, and write funny things, but I just can't write about anything which has affected me deeply - my mother and father's deaths, abuse (not by a family member), infertility, frustration at a Health Service unable to help my particular problems etc etc etc!!

    I particularly like the line, 'I wanna be free'.


  • Spiritual Nature
    October 20, 2008

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    MY MOUTH IS HANGING OPEN!!!

    WOW! You put into words that torment of my soul, but for me the girl is 3 and is hiding in a corn field, where no one can find such a little thing as me. But the things we know, the secrets to be kept, the longing of our souls...to be free of this torment.
    You just are an incredible, soulfull, deep down into my darkness, kind of writer. You should be published, really you should. Have you considered it?

    BLESSINGS & LOVE,
    Doris


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    May 14, 2008

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    I am so sorry that you went through that, and live with the memory and pain of it day in and day out. My heart bleeds for you. Yet, I am glad that you are connecting with that 13 year old girl. It is a good start. You can champion her and be friends. She is reaching out to you. I just loved your poem. I sense so much potential for healing within, and this journey has begun for you. I think it is wonderful. You are a very brave and remarkable woman. Blessing always, Karen


  • Nicada silver member
    May 7, 2008
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    Wow!

    This write is so full of all the emotions that this kind of horrible abuse brings on a child. It leaves its' mark on the heart and soul forever. I can relate to this too. I know that writing can be a big part of the healing process so it is great that you are writing. A very powerful write. I wish you the best in your healing journey. Blessings, Patty


  • buffsab99
    May 4, 2008

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    Tragic

    I am so sorry you had to endure this. One persons selfish act is a lifetime of torment for you. You express yourself so well and I truely hope writting helps heal your soul.


  • LovesLostLiterature
    April 28, 2008

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    WOW I like this poem alot! I am sorry if you realy had to go through that and I hope you keep writing because I found writing helps alot.


  • alwaysapartofme
    April 26, 2008

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    I loved i know that abuse can be hard to take. this poem shows it very well sweet job and keep written.


  • MrsJones
    March 19, 2008

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    Wow, I love it. Abuse is such a horrible and hard thing to go through and this is so heartbreaking. Thank you for entering.

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