It's after midnight and my body is hot with this burning desire for you.
Let your blood lust take over into to the moonlight
As you come and put out this heated fire.
Honey come and break the ice as we go up towards Heaven
Keeping this game up
24/7 doing those wonderful things you do.
Come on baby break the ice, make me give out a passioned filled sigh
Before I give out and die.
Your blood lust makes your eyes flash red,
As your continuing to thrust me into the bed more and more,
Filling the sheets, being soaked in gore.
Seeing me lying naked beneath these silken sheets
Is making your blood lust intense and go crazy as you trace your hot,
Burning tongue over my body, enveloping me in a euphoric haze.
Baby do you understand how much I scream
Every time your blood lust makes me cream.
Tasting my delicious honeyed juices as I enfold on this wonderful
Feeling when you just struck gold.
Let your blood lust take over you like a wild beast,
Biting my sweet, tender neck drawing blood as it makes you go
Even wilder turning me out even more.
Boy do you know how much your blood lust is affecting me right now?
How every time you hit that erogenous spot deep within me,
Freeing the crazed sex kitten within me.
Come on honey and break the ice,
Make me feel impassioned and nice as you kneel before me and suck me dry
Until I have tears rolling from my eyes.
So come on darling and break the ice,
As you take over my body and soul with your blood lust.
A contest entry
- ROUND TWO EROTIC CHALLENGE---INVITES ONLY by CinfullyDelicious.
900 points, ended April 17, 6 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - xxxDIRTY, EROTIC,FILTHY, HOT (Adult Only)xxx by voodoo ink.
1650 points, ended April 30, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I really loved taking all of the imagery in this poem...I like the dark theme, a somewhat different approach to the erotic contest...
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well this was interesting. i liked it. good luck in the contest thanks for entering
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This appears to me to be a work-in-progress. It has loads of great stuff in it, but no structure. The erotic ideas are there, and some of them are beautifully presented, but the layout looks and feels more like prose than poetry.
Perhaps you could take a look at this before judging? I'll read again then.
Good luck in the competition.
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I liked this...somewhat the flow felt interuppted in places..but for the most part I did enjoy it and it's eroticness
Thank you and good luck in round two
Cindy
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I really think that this would have been a little better if it had more of a poetic structure... and if you lost the word baby... the imagery and intensity of it all was very powerful, but.. just those two things kinda kept me from REALLY enjoying it.
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