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Two Shades Lighter

I wish I could be like you
Exactly like the rain that drips through
I wish I could be…
Exactly like you
No poetry, no spills, no velvet or leather
I’d die two shades below the rest
And still I’d never be better
Than you

I simply look like something ripped
From a comic strip
Brown eyes dipped in an artistic kiss
Too afraid to blink
Too scared my lashes might rinse
All that you left me, away

Exaggeration…
Rolled into the tips of the honest man
I was never that bold,
Or structured like so
I was no statue, no liar, no echo
Just the mirror in your room
And on your tongue
The eloquent reminder
How I hate to distaste you…
With no proper attire

But if we knew the known of not knowing at all
The dance of the tiles blackest memoirs
If we discovered the beyond’s beyond
Behind doors of the farthest unharmed
Retired, against!
I shout at the rest
Of two shades lighter than chance
Itself alone isn’t written in blood
No stone, not even shed upon
But fixable, incredibly based and layered
Drenched in the outlines of pure existence
This, this majestic trial…
And to think…
Only by chance,
Only by a sudden smile…


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  • Ellis gold member
    August 28

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    Having fun with words, are you?
    Let me know when you are through
    Time to buy then my Cat Food
    Two shades richer just for you!

    Tiki Cat
    Buy my Tiki's Gourmet Cat Food
    "Too Good For Humans"


  • Tweedle Dee
    April 20, 2008

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    Beautiful. Dude i loved this. This has got to be one of your best poems and the funny thing is that its one of your shortest. You did am-a-ssing! I LOVED IT!!! YOU ROCK THE WORLDS SOCKS. if only it had socks.

    Rock on dude.

  • greensweatrsiluv
    March 23, 2008

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    i always love to read your writing =]
    you have metaphors and expressions that leave me breathless
    breathless! =D
    like the comment above(or below?) i love the line "two shades lighter than chance" it really is a beautiful image =]
    keep writing it always amazes me


    • Tweedle Dum
      March 23, 2008
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      Thank You :)

      Thankyou so so much, it means alot to have people appreciate my writing. It's kind of important when you can actually get to people in that way. I put heart into it lol...well thanks!!!! I'm glad you like it!


  • Pisces Pieces
    March 17, 2008

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    Brown eyes dipped in an artistic kiss
    Too afraid to blink
    Too scared my lashes might rinse
    All that you left me, away

    at first that was my favorite part but as I continued to read I became more and more amazed with your concepts and metaphors...two shades lighter than chance...what a brilliant thought to ponder!

    Your writing and ways of expression are unlike any other

    • Tweedle Dum
      March 23, 2008
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      WELL dang.

      Thankyou pieces. I thought about you when I wrote this I guess cause I knew I'd put it on here lol! Otherwise it's hard to say what I was thinking at the time. Sometimes you live your life looking in from the outside of your little box and it scares the crap out of you. Actually I dont think thats what this poem was about..lol nevermind. Who knows. Psfh.
      THAKDNSLFKSAJ THANKS!!! It all means very much.

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