When I tell him I love him
Sadly it’s a lie [ily]
When he holds me when I cry
I feel bad because I am crying over you!
When I look back at all the notes
when I read each one of your poems
My heart dies more and more
I miss you and its not fair.
Why dose she get to be so lucky
Why dose she have what was once my life
Why dose it have to hurt so much
Why do I even care[?]
I miss you holding me in your arms
I miss you telling me everything will be alright
I miss you saying I love you
I miss you and all are stupid fights!
You think I am doing so good
Baby you have no clue
Hurting each and every day
Sucks, this you I am sure understand!
I need you and I want you
Why can you not see
You mean so much to me.
I cant let you go, and I am sorry
You promised me and I promised you
Promises were broken yes sweetie it is true
But I don’t even care right now
All I know is I need you!
She may say she loves you
You may even love her
But I hope you know that
She will NEVER!
Love you as much as I do
No one can you see
You mean the world and more to me
Its true baby.
Ps: ily && I cant let you go.
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grssssssss
I so understand this =[
this is beautiful.
keep writing, your words are magical! =]
~Rain
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Well Expressed!
Thanks for sharing sweet soul!
I hope your heart fills up with a true source of love.
Keep on penning on, very good works.
Peace, Dad. x
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This is really powerful. My favourite part is the first stanza because it hits home with how many times I've faked loving...or someone's faked loving me. Very nicely done with some very effective word choice. Thanks for commenting on my poem and keep up the great work!
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awesome poem. =).
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nice. I like it!! lots of emotion!
altho.. there was some spelling errors. thats the only thing I noticed. like i think "dose" should have been "does" and "our" "are"
other than that i REALLY liked it. especially the first few verses! <3
good job!
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This is very good. There is so much passion within this. Good work!
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WOW this is really good
i really like this one you did a great job on it wow is all i can say you did so good keep up the great work
~brookeann~
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