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She was not lost!

she is weak
she was pathetic
she couldn't stop crying
And she couldn't stop hurting

She hated herself and the world she lived in
Why did she hurt?
Why did she get touched?
Why did she have problems like these?

Did She deserve it?
No she never ever did anything wrong!
She tried her fucking best!
She didn't cry for attention,

And she didn't hurt herself for the fun of it!
It was never fucking fun!
She lived miserably,
Absolutly no fun in that is there?

Everyday she died
she fell and fell and fell....
deeper she went into the dark abyss...
Nothing seemed to lighten the darkness

of her nearing death
She was dieing
and dieing very
very

Slowly yet too fast for her to see
She felt the cold cruel
Waste land creeping to her
It was too cold for hell to even come to her....

Her blood ran cold
Her eyes dialating
her body freezing
And she grew paler that a vampire

She felt it crawling in her skin
Along her spin
Into her head and out threw her heart
She was falling

She froze her body solid...
She fell...fell....fell harder
She fell..
She fell harder than rocks

TIL SHE HIT!!
SHE HIT SHE BROKE SHE BROKE
TIL SHE WAS IN A MILLION FUCKING PEICES!!!
SHE WAS NOTHING!!

but...
she was lost...
she saw a light before she hit that frozon rock ground
she was not lost...

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  • Peachy
    March 27, 2008
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    Well, it obviously has strong emotions in it.
    It could flow a little more to make it more of a poem even if if it doesn't rhyme, however, rhyming was a rule for my contest...
    It was a very intense poem. It could have used less swearing but I suppose it might make a poem more emotional and real for some people.
    Thank you for entering!


  • Peachy
    March 21, 2008
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    Your prompt is.....
    someone dying (no suicide or cutting please)
    Good Luck!