The golden sun is setting
painting pastels in the sky.
A rocky shore caressing
the e'er incoming tide.
The image of a goddess
appears within the swells
created to perfection
awaiting birth upon a shell.
Neptune's magic nectar
is poured upon her form
to arouse the dormant Venus
Thus, the gift of Love is born.
Some may call her 'Aphrodite';
Some may call her 'Venus' too.
The 'Gift of Love Incarnate'--
I found that 'Gift' in You!
Author notes
Pic Inspired Contest: http://raipun.deviantart.com/art/The-birth-of-Venus-40717118
In a list
A contest entry
- Pic Inspired-Beautiful by sweetgirlwa.
1500 points, ended March 20, 2008, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What is your impression?
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Excellent
So very well done. Such a wonderful take on the picture. Congratulations on the silver trophy.
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Precious!!
Aaaaaaaaw Precious piece You have versed and Love the rhyme also the emotions You brought forth
Love the tale told also the sentiments at the end~
Wonderful!!
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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A truely amazing write here. I love your use of rhyme here! You have a wonderful ability to tell a story that is just amazing. Thank you so much for your entry
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Congratulations on the silver. I liked the little twist at the end as using it to compliment a special lady. Really nice.
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Interesting picture, sums up what I imagine the tales to be like, this is a very poetic description of one of my favorite Greek stories, Look's Good, Nail It!
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Well Buried, you should of really told me you were going to send me some love lol, and I would of prepared you a wonderful piece in return. Thanks for this gift lol...(I know, it wasn't for me)
been gone a couple of days and well, was hoping I was missed. I will enter your contest if I can find the link again sorry,
Love
Shannon
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Oooooohhhhhhhhhhhhh yayyyyyyyyyyyyyyy!!!!!!! This is a lovely take on the prompt that you did. It flowed so soft and had so much imagery. The rhyme was great and I like that you mentioned both goddesses. An excellent piece of writing and I wish you good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing it with me. seamaiden ♥
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You have such a wonderful talent for your writing. It simply shines with imagery. I really liked this!
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OMG!!! well written
i loved every line
Fricking awesome Poem
u said it all in such a short write
i love it
AWESOME
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Beautiful
Each stanza breathes so many wonderful words
But, for me your last stanza really spoke
I found that 'Gift' in You!... says it all
Much love Julie
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Wow ... I would hate to be judging this contest...there are some classy entries and this is no exception....wonderful write
Rob
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