Carefully and ever so quietly,
In the calm dark of night,
We sneak ever so cautiously,
Just to hold each other tight.
Its is all worth it in the end,
To secretly be by your side,
However I don't like to pretend,
It's nothing for us to hide.
I wish I was a bit older,
I usually don't like to rush,
So I dont have to have them over my shoulder,
I want it out in the open, instead of having to hush.
For now I will patiently wait,
For the day to come when I graduate,
When I walk down the seemingly broken road,
When I dont have it on my shoulders like a load,
When the time comes that we will be together,
When I can say it aloud, then we will be forever.
A contest entry
- Dark, Sad, Love, Loss, Suprise Me. by MrsJones.
350 points, ended March 21, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me cry....options =] and PW allowed :D by LeilaJayne.
900 points, ended May 17, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Nice expressions! Stellar flow and imagery! I like the last stanza the most. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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Great piece that really expressing the longing and love. I hope you're still together by that time. Thank you for entering!
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Loved the emotional outpouring you did in this poem. beautifully done best to you in the contest ~blessings always~ Trisha
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Good
This was really good Alexia!
It sucks to want something so bad sometimes but have to wait. Nice job on this =]
~Sierra~
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kewlness
This was amazing. I liked the emotion you let out in this. The love you two share must be intense because you expressed perfectly in this. You great flow and rhtyhm to this. Great write and Great job!!! -
this is really good alexia! i though u and ray are going out?..but yah good job!!
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yea we are, the poem is just bout the fact that i wish i was older and it would be easier for us, and i hate my mom lookin over my shoulder all the time or anyone for that matter bout wat we do jus cuz im not old enof yet i guess...we have to keep it secret..thats wat i hate..but i can deal i guess...its worth it
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