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Princess's Knoll


The bottom of the tree
Where they all go free
Take the hand that is offered
Shovel, pick, or axe
The knoll will ring tonight

Thoughts, voices, emotions
Drowned out under the searing heat
Water to dirt, dirt to blood
Last words to last breath

Thump no more the heart of lobe
Cry to those who no longer care
Black crows to the winter’s chill
Let loose all your emotions, rage out

Good bye infernal chill, steamed away
Death takes her next victim
Fight, Die, Live, Breathe, Sleep
The Death Knoll rings tonight.

Author notes

I wrote this when my dog died, about four months ago. She was my favorite, and I miss her terribly. The tittle is very special to me, for her name was Princess, and she always loved the sounds of bells and windchimes.

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  • Lionsloves Lair
    April 28, 2008

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    Thanks for posting this in the Lair

    3 claps=9 points


  • Lauren Noir
    April 26, 2008

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    I know how hard it can be to lose a pet! Some people just don't understand...but I do.

    this had such a darkness, there was a mixture of emotions that I likes, it blended nicely
    There was a nice rhythm and it kept it going so we kept reading. There were so many levels, I enjoyed delving in deeper into the meaning

    the title is beautiful
    Well done



  • StarEyes
    April 21, 2008

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    I wasn't sure what this was about till I got to your author note. I am soooooo sorry hon. It is just like loosing your brother, sister or another loved one when you loose a pet

    and love

    Nyetta

    Thanks for posting this in the reading room.


    • Luna Darling
      April 24, 2008
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      Yeah, It is a little confusing at first...I really did feel like I lost a best friend...She was ten years old and my first dog. Her breed was pomeranian and she was a tea-cup...so a really fluffy furbie that can bark. xD

      Luna


  • ckwriter69
    March 19, 2008

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    Nicely written, Its so sad to loose a dog or any pet for that matter. As they are so much a part of the family and our lives. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.


  • Powered by Tofu
    March 18, 2008

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    omg, this poem is so amazing.
    i can feel your grief for the loss of your pet. losing a pet is like losing a member of the family.
    this is a wonderful peice, i especialy love the imagry. great write, i love it.

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