You're a tough one, of sorts
Mixing in with those heavy cream thugs.
Placing your body on public lips,
you cause grown men to shake.
Labeled with warnings of burning flesh,
your scent alone forms empires.
Melting sweet, and getting away with it.
You're even tempting as a cold character.
Staining filters, a shock-jock's envy,
leaving sour aftertaste on the tongue.
Commended for coming from nature,
yet you knock down nature for a house.
Commercialized and claiming ambiance,
your shots are fired into weaker sister.
Topped off with a foaming mouth,
and paid well for your insanity.
Author notes
I really do love coffee, just wanted to put a different spin on it
In a list
A contest entry
- Coffee and Tea by AaronReed.
1000 points, ended March 31, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~ pre-writes ~ by LadyUnique.
300 points, ended May 8, 2008, 61 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I really took a leap on talking about "Love & Coffee" in a poem I once wrote called "Ethiopia", which I'm speaking about Ethiopian coffee (which I dislike with a passion but still drink it once in awhile) yet no one makes that connection. Probably because the title of the poem is just "Ethiopia" and not "Ethiopian Coffee" but that just give it a bit a way, no? eh.
A good poem that you have written here.
-Nam
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intriguing title
this is clever as clever gets. i really enjoyed this
off to the finalist list it goes and i wish you luck from there
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I love it!
It can be taken in more than one way!!!
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very diferant i loved it
good luck
cheeky x
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Me too. Love it so much I am crazy without it.
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GREAT Poem, good use of words.
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Chuckles I like the spin here, being a bit (mild understatement) of a coffee head I can identify with this write.
'Topped off with a foaming mouth,
and paid well for your insanity.'
Yes it is an insanity maybe.
Good luck.
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this is soo clever and... cool! brilliant metaphor, i dont know how you wrote somehting like this! my favourite lines were:
Commended for coming from nature,
yet you knock down nature for a house.
and
Placing your body on public lips
i must say though that i needed the explanation in the author notes, but hey, thats probably just me. great work
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I love the double meaning in the title. For a poem about coffee, it is very interesting. Well stirred and thought- provoking blend of metaphors. Nice.
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This poem has to be one of my favorites, I loveddd the vibe, the flow, I love the constant rythm, I love the part where you said Placing your body on public lips,
you cause grown men to shake.
Labeled with warnings of burning flesh,
your scent alone forms empires.
Thats my favorite part, this is great
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It's a powerful brew all right, even though it's perfectly legal. Probably changed the course of history more than once.
I like the way you expressed this. Was itover a cup of coffee? -
It's a powerful drug all right and there is something illicit about it, even though it's quite legal and consumed by millions.
I like the way you expressed this aspect of coffee. Over a cup of Java perhaps?
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My favorite line is the last line.
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love it,wonderful.
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I thought that was really cleverly done!
Clever, clever, clever....I really enjoyed your smart
WIT on this prompt...coffee...it was truly enjoyable
and made you just smile to read it!
well done poet! well done!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen/Seattle
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I am glad the one person mentioned the title and computers, I wouldn't have got it otherwise. Very clever. I enjoy the point about us burning down the rain forest to brew more coffee. That is something I let people know when they think they are doing the world good by drinking coffee. Keep writing.
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oh my...you really put a new twist on drinking coffee...its good imageries and its nice rhythm surely will make a lot of people crave for more coffee...this is such an awesome write!!!
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cool
i like the twist you put on the coffee, it has great emotions and discriptions in this poem, good luck in the contest and keep writing, -Amy
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Nice...I like it. My husband would admire your title...even if he didn't get the poem. He's a software engineer. Very clever. Good luck!
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