your intentions to tell me the lies that dangled at my lips like a slow dyeing hope
i'd like to tell them i wish they'd have something more to give
everyday the lies come throw away the truth let it die
i'm so afraid that i've been canceled in your mind
teach me that your love is breaking
i told you i'd die for you
everything changed mental photographs of long ago
the pain i felt for you
tears stain the angels face as she cries tonight under the stars
she's fallen from your grace she cant stand the thought of not being loved bye you
rain is falling outside she runs from the fears that take her bye the hand.
she cant be convinced that he's not there waiting hiding but just in sight
she'll never look back to that past were the lies linger and wait
just ought of sight
she thinks for ever you and me
A contest entry
- Love by Yumi.
600 points, ended March 27, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
does it suck? (tell the truth)
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Beautiful, full of emotions and meaning, simply stunning. ""tears stain the angels face as she cries tonight under the stars" We've all been there and we all know the pain. Don't let it control you, that's the key. Wonderful write, I know your heart was in it the whole way. Best of luck to you!
Erica ^.^
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thanks.and i wont or i'll try not to let it control me.thanks for the comment again.
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No, it doesn't suck! Gosh, I hate it when people ask that, don't you take pride in what you do? Actually, I thought this was pretty good. I didn't see a whole lot showing versus telling, but I don't think that was an issue here, to my astonishment. Good job.
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thanks.i put that whole does it suck thing on there when i first joined all poetry because i wasn't sure if was any good and wanted people to tell me so yeah.thanks for the comment.
smileys and double xo's
momo
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