Clouds come rolling in.
The dry barren grass looks towards Heaven,
as it’s blown in rhythm with breezeless wind.
There are no flowers in the wasteland.
On my knees,
(Praying for rain from Heaven?
Praying for mercy from the Father?)
No.
Reaching for you.
Please, fill my thirsting mouth
Author notes
it's easier to run.
A contest entry
- 50-55 words by creationsfromheart.
475 points, ended March 20, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Excellent imagery... Congratulations!
Ken -
yea you better run, from me... i missed you on sunday..
me cry cause you didn't come.
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hey you, this is really good, I am still amazed at your age and how well you write! You should start working on capitials and punctuations with them and you will see what a differance it will make for your responses.
Heaven should be capitalized in both as it is a place like a state would be also you need a few punctuations in the first stanza if you use them use them all the way through
other then that this is good the words of choice I enjoy very much and
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thank you so much for such a kind comment.
I want to be an English teacher, but I despise capitalization and punctuations. I edited it, cause you're the boss.
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LOL
Well then maybe you will be a good english teacher, as then you won't have to do it but understand the hate of it and not inforce it so ofeten lol the kids will love you for that!
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