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They were pretty enough to eat.

Just looking made me drool.
Miniature women, I called them,
tiny men,
With a trustful need to please.

I was deceit and terror,
hidden eyes behind a door
grasping hands
a tremulous devotion to destruction.

I wanted more.

I gnashed my teeth in frustration.
Bit my tongue.
Screamed to God to stop me.

But the innocent taste too good
and I love the gore.

Always it returned.
The craving for control,
the lust for flesh and ownership.

I've done despicable things
and sometimes I cry for myself and them.

But I want what I want,
so I don't try to stop it anymore.

Author notes

Quote number 2: I was bad, I had done bad things...

This quote reminded me of the sex offenders that I worked with in a mental hospital. I knew that we would never cure them.

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  • Everwind Rising
    April 4, 2008

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    Wow this is stark and distrubing. Excellent take on the prompt and a little scary concerning the source of your inspiration.


  • Marcy Anna
    March 24, 2008

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    This poem shakes me. It creeps me out and makes me feel the heavy burden of the writter. Whoever reads this is taken into the mind of the man/woman whether they like it or not. Great job on grabbing the reader, chaining them to a chair and forcing them into the heart of the poem whether they could bear it or not.


  • Sprite silver member
    March 19, 2008
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    You are making me blush...and smile. Thank for such careful reading. I did think carefully about the wording. Since I have worked with rapists (and possibly with future murderers!) it was important to me to convey them the way I have seen them.


  • Viva La Vie Boheme
    March 19, 2008

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    I've just returned to this, and a few more things I especially love -
    "a trustful need to please" - really captures children, and the use of the word "trustful" was perfect there, I believe.
    "devotion to destruction" - love the juxtaposition, with devotion having positive connotations of building up a relationship or love and destruction being the antithesis of that.
    "Always it returned" - I love the vagueness of "it". It captures the use of euphemisms, and how they're abundant in modern society. It is so true, too, and you use it throughout this poem - we sugar-coat things to make them more bearable.
    As a friend of mine once said, "can't you even bear to have an honest conversation with yourself?"


  • Viva La Vie Boheme
    March 17, 2008
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    I think this can be interpreted to many things within a mental hospital or with mental health problems... sex offenders, sociopaths, some people with borderline (apparently, I don't pretend to be an expert) but wow...

    This is absolutel amazing. I can't express how much I love it. Thanks for entering!


    • Sprite silver member
      March 17, 2008
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      I am very happy that you like it. This is a subject that really excites me to write. I have a couple of others that I wrote about how I felt about who I was working with, but none like this one. Thank you for giving me the opportunity to delve into their psyche.

      -Joyce


      • Viva La Vie Boheme
        March 17, 2008
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        As soon as the contest is over and I can get around the anonymisation, I'd LOVE to check them out! Very interested in psychology (not bright enough to do psychiatry) so I'll definately check them out. I love looking into people's minds... and I love writing. So if you can combine them both, I'm fulfilled

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