A word to the (Emo)tional
To what do you complain?
Your constant claims of suicide
Are driving me insane
Did Daddy ground you for a week
Or is the ex to blame?
Somehow self-harm and sacrifice
Makes everything okay?
Learn such terms as "gratitude"
Young masters of conceit
While you complain of things unfair
Some live upon the streets
Have you no food to line your gut
No clothing on your spineless backs?
Yet all you do is bitch and cut
Spare us this foolish pity act.
"No one cares" and "It's not fair"
Day-long(Daily?) screamed to mercy's masses
Depressed and scared,we're well aware
But save your grief 'til after classes
While it's true that some do
Have reason for such constant crying
Parents divorce, a friend to war
Someone close to heart near dying
..I'm having fun with this,updates soon.
Debating the beginning of the second line,third stanza,which do you prefer?
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I do think you wrote well. I will tell you that those who commit suicide don't do it because of petty reasons usually. My mom had been diagnosed with being bipolar( manic depressive) disorder ..no medication helped..counseling didn't help. She felt helpless.. The ups and downs went on for as long as I can remember. Thankfully I never blamed myself for not doing enough to help. and I myself do not suffer and have never been suicidal. My mom used to say she wished she had my way of thinking. I think I used to be too quick to judge but I don't now.
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Leave it to sis to try and fight my battles
I'm in the process of making it a bit more obvious I'm talking to the posers (a good 80% of the self claimed emos)as she said.Yea we do have a porta-potty ironically, but it's mom's side of the family thats redneck,you know that.
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sorry i had to comment on the last comment...first of all no one "earns" the "right" to self mutilate...it's a sign of mental illness(or a chemical imbalance), second i'm pretty sure mason wasn't saying if bad things have happened to you suck it up and get over it...he was saying (more so to the "posers") get over yourself and if you're so fucking miserable do something about it and don't make everyone else miserable in process. 3rd...you're 12...you might want to be figuring out who you are and what you need to be happy because if you think you've got problems now...it's only gonna get worse. there will always be someone who doesn't like you, people will always die, but there's only one you and you're the only one that decide to be happy and do what you need to do to be happy. if you have a chemical imbalance see if you can get on medication...if it makes you feel better, it's worth it....
now that i've said that...don't you have a port-a-potty at your house, mason? lol -
my god
great poem and everything but god you guys genaralize all emos thats like saying every white person is a redneck who owns a porta-potty, its just rediculous. you dont know every emo person and they......we are individuals. people who sometimes claim theyre emo are just posers and the things in which you stated in this poem are very, very stereyo typical. Im 12 years old, i get the crapped kicked out of me by my peers, just for being gay and there are people.......relatives, who should love me who say they dont, ive just been diagnosed with a very serious sickness (again) and three people of which i was close with recently died.....have i not earned the right to complain a little? i also have a chemical inbalance so i get reall depressed and i tend to cut......so what.....there are many emo people who have every right to cry, complain, and cut, i am one of them and emo people, are people just the same and they shouldnt be treated differently without reason. -
lol this is awsome
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relentless screams...i like that. i know it kind of changes the flow if you say screams, instead of screamed, but i think i like that better...hey do you ever go to thesaurus.com? you should check it out. it helps trying to find the right word. love you bub.
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what about "never-ending screams" or "infinite screams", "endless screams" something along those lines?
overall i really like this...your cynicism comes shining through.
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