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Frost on the Window

 

Every inch pushing deeper,

lacing sweet spillings

with soft kisses

 

Moans encase my heart,

beating it against

the bones

 

Then,

with eyes opening,

I realize how cold my fingers are.

 

Author notes

Unrequited love.

For Vexen ♥

In a list

A contest entry

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  • Arkbear gold member
    March 18, 2008

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    Coolio!

    A Gold out of 19 entries.....not bad!

     

    ...but I knew it was going to win the first time I read it :)

     

    Way ta go Boy!

     

    Papa Bear ~


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    March 17, 2008

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    Wow ~ so detailed and vividly intense. Just loved this!!!... Thanks ever so much for sharing this and many blessings to you too... x Lavender Butterfly.

  • Arkbear gold member
    March 17, 2008
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    Wow ~

    Intense....vivid....perfect ~

     

    Can I borrow your passionate side for the week?

     

    Dang Boy.....you sure took advantage of your talents with this write.....I hope the Judge sees and reads what just I saw and read.......the first two lines are the bomb, but every line after seems to raise the bar for the next,

     

    ....well done for sure, good luck to you and your entry,

     

    Papa Bear ~


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    March 17, 2008

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    this is so beeautifully written I htink i am just going to give up writing now and let you take over

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    March 17, 2008

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    hehe This is a very good poem here sweety I am impressed love you lots goodluck in the contest best wishes and much love always


  • Angel Full Of Hurt
    March 17, 2008

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    Oh wow this is definitely a charmer

    Lovely title..lovely starting line then drops to a good poem body wow..you write well..hope you win something maybe a silver or gold? you rock Marluxia!!!

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