Heart pumping, thudding loud,
hysteria oozing every pore.
Overwhelming panic ensues,
as the bleak abyss devours.
Mind filled with onyx shadows,
dark ravines quake and shudder.
Thunder claps in dismay,
fear laced reflections unveiled.
Author notes
I want no more than ten lines
free verse
Your Prompt: Fear
Ok I know this isn't great. I have never done free verse before so was difficult as every instinct was telling me to rhyme..lol.
A contest entry
- For Women Only by Dalaney.
600 points, ended March 17, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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excellent
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A really amazing free verse, it almost feels like it is rhyming in a weird sort of way =D Fantastic description as it suits fear very well
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Excellent
Your take on this prompt gave me shivers. I like the way you wrtoe this poem. Says it all in a big way. Best of luck in the contest, Take Care, Michele
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i applaud your attempt at free verse! I hope you will enter more of my free verse contests...you are really good. Love, Lane
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Excellent
Shadows cascade around this poem reflecting the depth and darkness off the write. It gives an imagery of sorrow to me and a lot of pain. Not up on free verse myself as it is hard to write if you Rhyme but you seem to have done a good job here. Even if it is not what is needed in this contest the poem is Excellent. Brian.
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Not great? Well it's certainly not bad.
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Dark, with a capital 'D' Amazing writing and imagery here. You have done it again with this superb piece
Well done
Lady D
Wayne Leon
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