Black and white perceptions
Of a body fatally flawed.
Colourless reflections;
And in the mirror,
Sick distortions.
Growing hunger gnawing
With every tiny motion.
The desperate measures
Of a little girl
Tainted by society's poisons.
Author notes
Inspired by: my life.
In a list
A contest entry
- 10/10/10 Quickie Word Prompt by lostangel07.
800 points, ended March 17, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Please adopt me on AP by Folklor.
525 points, ended April 21, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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so many girls go through this. Thank you for entering.
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This is about having an eating disorder, correct? Just double checking. xD
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Yes, it is
Thankyou for the comment.
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Very good.
Beautifully thought out and executed.
Best of luck!
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that realy spoke to me, can't realy think of the word i want to say, it just wont come out. this just proves how bad my writers block is! i liked it, such few words brought out so much
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oy. dark and beautiful!
my two most favorite things.
this is excellent. it makes me wanna curl up into a little emo ball and listen to evanescence and burn and stick of incense and mediate and just... let me spirit soar.
it's dark and bewitching.
love it.
wonderful, beautiful job!
best wishes and best of luck! -
Short but you made your point. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck. ..<3.. Shelly
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wow.... magesticlly great.. good job!
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Good luck in my contest.
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Thank you for entering my short poems contest. This is a very well written poem that really made me think while I was reading it.
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this is such a lovely poem! I really enjoyed it! but you have a gold trophy, which is always great! but maybe I didn't explain properly..you need to have a bronze (which you do) and you're allowed HMs..you're not allowed anything above a bronze (gold and silver) I totally love this poem though, and congratz on the gold, you deserve it
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Sorry, I hadn't realised. Will be replacing my poem shortly
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Wonderful job babe
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wow an excellent poem.
I can't wait to get to know you
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Oh wow i loved this.. LOVED IT short, but powerful. You conveyed your message perfectly FANTASTIC write
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wow this is such a strong piece you have reflected a deep truth about society that not somany are aware to. you are by far a beautiful writer and ai love you
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Wow...my sis is getting stronger and stronger well done Jojo...great write real passion and feeling...
Society "by the way" SUX....
Simon
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ooooooooh, very good, makes you think
very pretty hehe. I love it, good work
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Sorry, I gtot my messages mixed up - please ignore this.
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This has a sultry power that disturbs because the meaning is shrouded and that develops a demand in the reader for explanations. Seriously disturbing but beautiful (I'm all mixed up!)
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for the first time ever we were in the same contest and you beat me .... i got fifth .... congrats girlios! luv ya
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well penned
Well written darl hope you keep up the good writing. Hope to talk to you later. Congrantulations on the trophy.
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girlios i havent seen you rhyme since you wrote those sonnets!! whats up?
but i loved this. short but meaningful and powerful.
luv ya
keira
behind.blue.eyes
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Meh *shrugs*
<3
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Sigh. One so many of us have been through. Or seen others go through. An excellent piece. Good job and best of luck. Thanks for entering.
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