Very trying, very taxing,
And yet, the ultimate goal, even concealed, sings like a siren,
And I am its willing captive, its slave,
Who knows reward is just beyond the horizon,
Edging ever so slowly, like the sweetest promises
She let fall on these dry, thirsty lips, a perfect combination
With her softness, her lushness, a perfect marriage
Of like-minded potentialities, the possibilities
Of frustrated passions unleashed, whispered screams in the dark
Echo off enlivened pores, keeping time
With subconscious searches for mirrored release,
Release...
Release into a void of drowning completion,
A total disregard of consequence, save the accomplishment
Of finally attaining that silence, that thunder,
That ultimate goal that yet hides,
That proves itself oh so very elusive, oh so
Very trying, very taxing.
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Written December 3rd, 2003
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I like it very much! its very entertaining!
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Sexy
i had to read it a couple times cause my brain is mush from the Deftones show last night. ohh and yes this is always the best part.
but damn now im craving some of that.
"Release into a void of drowning completion,
A total disregard of consequence, save the accomplishment
Of finally attaining that silence, that thunder,
That ultimate goal that yet hides,
That proves itself oh so very elusive, oh so
Very trying, very taxing."
Taxing being? like babies/emotions/commitment? i could be confused but also maybe slow. -
1000 cheers!
Rhyme and run..
what is left behind..for this reader is a show of art from the sight from eyes to the hand..a client of life is what I see from these words..with the forceful power of what they see and feel..this was like a rest in church for me to read!
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interesting flow with this...
ahhh yes... to be that incurable romantic!
And a way to soar in the sky with your heart!
I did enjoy!
Keep penning on my friend!
Bill
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Awesome
Ah...I love, love, love the repetition of the opening and closing lines! One of my favorite little playthings in my own poems. Great flow and rhythm to this, as per usual. There was a little snag for me on the first line of the last stanza..."complete drowning" snagged me (for some reason I'm not quite sure of)...other than that, this was Mary Poppins on my poetry guage...practically perfect in every way. Thanks for sharing your always wonderful poetry. Loved it.
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Yummy.
I agree, very trying & very taxing is all of this business.
pondering potentialities & possibilities... as always, wonderful words, from one of the kings of the chatterbox...
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Very very well written. Beautiful to say the least. I loved the break with "Release...". Very nice and rewarding. Seemed to cut off and prepare the reader for the amazing lines to come.
"She let fall on these dry, thirsty lips, a perfect combination
With her softness, her lushness, a perfect marriage"~ MY favorite part. Keep it up man.
Treble
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