night melts
in her kohl lined eyes,
whilst
they muse with dewdrops
reading
unfinished love letters
from distant stars.
a hope
entangles
with moonbeams,
another knot,
another night,
of pining...
A contest entry
- Unrequited love by Lavender Butterfly.
460 points, ended March 17, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very emotional, nice take. I can feel the pining!
And congrats on the trophy!
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Truly compelling and deeply emotion driven. Thanks ever so much for sharing this and many blessings to you too... x Lavender Butterfly.
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thanks Lavender for the fragrant remark and most of all for the blessings and encouragement
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WOW!! Aint that really powerful??!! I am so glad that someone else besides me took a dark lead on the prompt
I have a thing that this might win something...I ll leave that to LB 
all the best
pri
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thanks pri... that was a sweet encouraging comment.Just passed by your page, will drop by soon.
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You've captured unrequited love so very well here! i had visuals of a vast desert, a lone woman and the big expanse of sand and stars around her... wonderfully succinct piece of writing.
~ Nicolette
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dry thirsting sands,unquenched thirst,dunes like parched lips ...waiting.. winds unhindered singing... hmm. completes the piture.
thanks nic. as always for the bouquet of words
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