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tears

she sits in the dark crying
her pain eats away her soul
she wipes her tears the pain makes her feel alive
she is numb it hurts to feel anything but pain
sorrow is her comfort why am i here
what purpose do i serve
she asks over and over again
as she wipes away the tears

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  • Swords in Ice
    March 17, 2008
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    Not great

    Not one of your best hun, its a bit all over the place and doesn't emote all too well for me.