A silent grave on the way side,
Sparse notions of freedom and love.
Just a little farther, another stride
And we'll find everything we've dreamed of.
Freeze Frame - I'm [not] about to break.
Entwined emotions of egality,
Branded with a repertoire that's fake,
Oh, the beauty in this false reality.
Taken all which we can receive,
Punished those who mirror our own.
Witnessed all that can be perceived,
Now you just want to go home.
Help me aim to our endless midnight
And I swear we'll make it.
Let us get this fight right
So the last puzzle piece will fit.
Every single memory along the way
Will flash through with immense strength,
The strength inside us both from the start, to this day...
The journey you take, I'll take, no matter the length.
Author notes
So... inspired by the many talks with RAVENBLOOD about life in general. Where the journey will take us - be it to those shady trees or to years down the track.
(A note on the word "egality" It's a word ok. Just because my firefox doesn't know how to spell it. Gosh. But anyway, if that's actually spelt wrong, can someone please correct me [And NO I don't mean Egalitarianism ok?])
If you want, I can go through and explain the different metaphors for you. If not, well then I won't.
Waffle you Scruffles
A contest entry
- My sisters! come write for them you know you want too by Lady Australis.
800 points, ended May 7, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Freeze Frame
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*growls at Emmy*
Such a beautiful poem darling. I can almost step out and pretend its not about me, that way I dont have to BS in my comment...
Loved the sociology terms,
and just the way you expressed everything. Very beautiful.
"Freeze Frame - I'm [not] about to break.
Entwined emotions of egality,
Branded with a repertoire that's fake,
Oh, the beauty in this false reality."
I loved the way this suggests differing sides of depression. I'm about to and I'm starting to live again. Although it confuses me with how the egality fits in. Social equality.. Not sure how that fits in at all. I'm sure you'll tell me. and the last line in that little stanza, pure poetic. lovely.
Loved the background too..
Love you darling. Waffle you Scruffles.
Forever ..XoXo.. Claire-Anne ..XoXo.. Forever
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this is beautiful darling
thankyou for entering for our baby
she will love it
good luck n luffles u too
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