it grows in the pit of my stomach
niggling at me like a worm
snaking through me
the sinking feeling that drags me
into the quagmire of my
uncontrollable doubt
dark thoughts pervade my usual demeanor
and peace of mind takes flight
I've done it again
I fear I've hurt you too deeply this time
Author notes
10 lines
Free verse
Prompt:- Fear
In a list
A contest entry
- For Women Only by Dalaney.
600 points, ended March 17, 2008, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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such a powerful poem! I love this. Thank you for taking a simple prompt and giving me a truly good entry. Love, Lane
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wow i hope your forgiven
xxx good luck
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Goose bumps All Over
This is very powerful piece it hits me hard. For one of my biggest fears is to hurt someone I love and care for. Wonderful piece.
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Forgiveness is a part of any ‘true’ loving friendship; a beautiful and poignant write my dear.
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Very good - putting your finger on a fear which is, in some ways, very mundane. And that makes it all the more scary.
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oh mummy I knew something was bugging you alst night and I know that you will say your fine but even i can see past the words and you should know that..oh and corrine will for sure..she always does with mine. Im here for you and I love till you the light dosnt shine..which is never because theres stars and moons so there is always a light
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wow,,revelations here,,is this healing, or just a wonderful contest entry.good luck again xx peter
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oh wow mum..
what vivid even sort of haunting imagery thats within this one.
Some great darker writting
Cin
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