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Rebirth through repetition

I cover myself

in explanations

of why I spilled

a thousand I love you’s over you

 

the moon fell between words tonight

with naïve whispers hidden in vacant thoughts

 

empty skin

 

t  r  e  c  h  D

 

over brittle bones

content in repetition

 

too much space closes in around me

at a time when poetry died

beneath the smooth words of sharpened tongues

 

denial shatters

like glass

as realization grabs my throat

drifting in oceans of blank pages and cursor blinks

 

I saved your echoes

inside empty pockets

behind cracked smiles

with eyes half full of hope

 

while all along drowning in dead-ends

and a thousand repeated I love you’s

 

 

 

 

3/16/08

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Prompt: Inspired by Rowan's poem "Under-Tow" http://allpoetry.com/poem/3948923

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  • Ithica silver member
    April 10, 2008

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    Oh this should have gone Gold! It is simply a marvelous read and full to the brim with emotion... Very admirable write...

  • vertigo beat
    March 27, 2008

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    -at a time when my poetry died
    beneath the smooth words of sharpened tongues
    favorite part in the poem.


  • raggyann
    March 25, 2008
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    this is fantasic
    all of it


  • Tam
    March 23, 2008

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    oh Becky...

    this is so breath taking!
    and Kathleen is truly an amazing poet, isn't she?
    I LOVE ROWAN...even have her poetry on my author page...LOL...thought folks might wish to read some REAL poetry if they visited me...ROFL...
    I have actually tried to pen a poem inspired by Kathleen myself...but I failed miserably because my Muse is so overwhelmed by Kathleen's talent...LOL...no words will fall from my intimidated pen for Rowan...
    but you my dear lady...penned a beautifully haunting tribute inspired by her lovely poetry...
    damn good writing here Becky...
    you truly are an amazing poet with a heart of gold...
    I do pray this jewel receives gold...
    thank you for sharing your love of Rowan with all of us here...there is no greater poet more deserving of accolades than Kathleen...
    this has painted such a big smile on my little face!
    Blessings! Tammy

  • Suzanne Dia
    March 17, 2008

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    You are shadowing my life or I am shadowing yours. I find it fascinating, really. Denial shattered for me a few days ago..crashed to my feet and then mocked me with the tinkle of it's shattered laughter.

    But you know? I'm okay with it. I feel at peace with the situation now.



    I hope you do too.



  • Rowan gold member
    March 17, 2008

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    aww, thanks, I'm honored and humbled. This is gold to me.
    Thanks again, hon.


  • Layne
    March 17, 2008

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    "I cover myself in explanations
    of why I spilled
    a thousand I love you’s over you"

    -I am in LOVE WITH THOSE LINES....THis is an amazing piece Becky, the imagery is crazy!!!!!!!!!! I love it....

    always a pleasure when I read your work...

    Love Layne


  • cheaphotelsign
    March 16, 2008

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    awesome...another effing fantastic offering...i love the honesty of your words...the thoughts are crystal, as are the images...the language is captivating and i love the visual effect. so very good.


  • Randomly Beautiful
    March 16, 2008

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    It's funny you have the word rebirth in the title. Before I saw the entry I used that word as a title prompt in my latest contest. I love the fact that I decided to hold this one. You are all such wonderful poets. This is lovely.

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