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The True Cost of War

Given a pass by everyone who watched him play ball

Golden Boy

Slid into college like a savior come to town

Free ride

Set records, got the cheerleader, got the degree

The American Dream

Signed up for Iraq and met a roadside bomb

Brain dead

Cared for in a hospital for the rest of this life

Free ride



Author notes

I have nothing but respect for the men and women serving in Iraq. I have little but contempt for the ones who sent them there. I have a good friend who went through this with his son. Sorry I went so far to the Dark Side on this one.

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  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    May 27, 2008
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    Thanks for entering.
    Good luck.
    Brian


  • Little Lottie
    April 4, 2008

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    I liked this a lot. It was very interesting. I don't support wars of any kind because a war is vindictive terrorism(in my opinion anyway) and it causes so much damage that could have possibly been avoided. Though I've never known anyone who has gone through this, I can say that it hurts me just as much. Anyway, very nice job. Good luck.


  • Kari gold member
    March 31, 2008

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    Congrats on winning gold on the phoenixonfire contest. I really like this one a lot and it gave me chills!


  • Dalaney gold member
    March 29, 2008

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    this gave me a shiver. you used the prompt well, and congrats on your previous gold. Love, Lane


  • individuality gold member
    March 22, 2008

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    i wish the war(s) would end - there are so many who are being killed and people like you speak of here who are left in crazy states after showing so much promise in life - a good poem.


  • pantress silver member
    March 19, 2008

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    This poem is real good. flows nicely. Another winner!? I think everyone dreams of this dream. we were all programmed to want this. Well, the girls just a little different.lol * suggestion "Slid into college", these words were full of imagery, pefect, powerful!! But "Went to" and "Will be cared", I think could use more imagery/description. The story line is right on. What do you think? jennifer


  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    March 18, 2008

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    A succinct and powerful piece on the macho mystique and the insanity of war. I'm sure you meant the last line in the ironic sense, but the burdens borne by both the afflicted and the nation are only beginning to be realized. I look forward to reading more of your poetry. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    March 18, 2008

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    You state your case well, maybe you should visit the Dark Side more often!

    All the best in the contest...

    Sue

  • phoenixonfire
    March 18, 2008

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    WOW!!! I am so awestruck by the way u have framed the whole work! Its so disheartning that people have to die like this!! Its pathetic! Wonderful work!! I am sure u will move to the next round!

    Thanks for entering and good luck!

    pri

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