Moonlight hangs
in dusty rays
from the black
satin curtains
wrinkles
bottomless ravines
wherest eyes
glide past
ebony satin
pools upon
the untouched
carpeted floor
color unknown
in the strange shadows
swaying slowly
as the cool air
makes love
with the heat
of the night
pallid skin
a make of
two curves
of two entities;
lustrous glow
in the darkening
evening
her hair;
deeper shade than
endless abyss
trailing,
wreathing slowly
careening with the wind
grazing
her rounded curves
face
tucked in a
distant shadow
as he
takes her hips
swaying slowly
as weeping willows
on a summer wind
branches tucked slowly
into grassy pockets
of intimate dreams...
lips... slowly trailing
upon tender skin
'round luscious curves
leaving her
breathless
whispering short
words into his
dampening brow
more does he give her
swallowing her words
pulling her from earth
and throwing her
into an endless vortex
of ecstasy
falling from their knees
they come together
skin upon skin
muscles tightening
as one
lips pleasuring
teasing
pleading
as bodies come
together
toes curling
feet arching
to seemingly perpetual
bliss
Author notes
My really long prose.... =D
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the beginning is slow, but I like that because it slowly builds and the reader finds themselves reading faster and faster as they become engrossed in the poem.
This was wonderfully penned
Dani
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I like this a lot..the beginning was a bit slow but it became a Hell of a lot better as you progressed! Very sweet write..not overbearing. U have a nice style.."endless vortex of ecstasy"..wow
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this is a GORGEOUS piece, it is so sensual, yet so pure at the same time, like it could be talking about nature, or dancing, or something else, if you know what i mean? but something so sensual that it just captivates me. its kinda hard to write what i mean, im not entirely sure of the right words to use, but i just feel this poem could have so many different meanings and themes behind it, which gives it real depth and adds to the beauty of the overall piece. great write thanks for sharing!
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very nice..sensual and warm. like the perspective here...and the style. a very enjoyable read! thank you for this entry. best wishes.
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very erotic. nice
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very good, nice read. only thing is i'd add some more non-physical phrases in, near the middle it became a little too centerd on bed
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