Blinding veil of white,
snowplows clearing buried streets:
abandoned car -- crunch.
Author notes
This: ))
is the snowplow.
This: _
is the car
This: ******
is the crunch
A contest entry
- Haiku by InBetweenThoughts, all welcome by InBetweenThoughts.
600 points, ended April 12, 2008, 45 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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haiku by emoticon! I like it. The crunch is definitely like that.
jjj
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Thank you so much for your Haiku
I appreciate your entry... All counts are good, good form,and authors notes, thank you..best wishes, Ken IBT
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I got the graphic before the explanation. I thought it worked well, though I read the asterices as snow. Nicely done, Jim, and "howdy".
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Snow would work too ...
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Nice--begins in a kind of idealistic, Christmas-card world and ends with a crunch. Like it very muchy. Well done.
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great job with the Haiku prompt, again, your words capture imagery, simple enough for all to recognize, and complex enough for all to ponder....great job...by the way, is that title a snowplow? if it is , genius!!
my other guesses were a Tank or a phallic symbol, although the latter was a last second thought....good luck to you!
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The dash is the car ...
the stars are the crunch.
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HAHAHAHAHA! Now, this is the kind of haiku I like! I seldom write haiku because they annoy me slightly, but I love it when they are used creatively. I've read that technically a proper haiku is supposed to be about nature, but who says yours doesn't fit the bill?
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It's a great example of an urban haiku.
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Food, cold and accident.
I liked the contrast.
Blessed Be
Allura -
Excellent haiku and although some poor soul would be counting the cost, this put a smile on my face.
Thanks and good luck...Sue
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