in autumn heat wave
flowers hiding in the shade
she takes her clothes off
Author notes
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Please post in your Authors notes
"This is a great form of poetry
that flows from my thoughts,
though the picture I see is greater,
I have summed it all up beautifully in such short verse."
A contest entry
- Haiku by InBetweenThoughts, all welcome by InBetweenThoughts.
600 points, ended April 12, 2008, 45 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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lovely imagery and I admire your talent~!
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Aha!!! You're a pervert!!! hehe! Just kidding... this is a cute Ku!!! Best of luck!
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You know if Bukowski ever wrote haikus. I think what you wrote here would be it. lol
- Aly
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Buk
Hi Aly! No, i reckon this is too subtle for Buk!
He would have written something like:
vomit on roses
growing out of the bottles -
rip your short skirt off
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Now that I really think about it. You're probably right.
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OK? LOL. How do you think he would have written a haiku on this topic? I'd like to have your take on it.
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I can't write a decent haiku to save my life. lol
I think that he would of been more blunt with the ending. He wouldn't of bothered with her skirt. He would of went straight to business.
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business
LOL! You're right!
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Thank you so much for your Haiku
I appreciate your entry... All counts are good, good form,and authors notes, thank you..best wishes, Ken IBT
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wow, this is a very beautiful haiku youve written, i like the last line, it was deffinitly one of those "aha" moments, great job
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aha
Great to get your response. Thanks heaps!
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Nothing like a naked twist in the wink on a hot windy day. well said. Men think about nude women every 30 sec or so, or more often if the opportunity ARISES.lol.
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That is a nice erotic twist!
I like!
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hello there - perhaps you could take up using adjectives more in your own poetry? everyone is different in their approach to writing, you, as you show here, prefer to use the haiku form, i though do not. to me it is a weak form. my skills at writing are honed enough i think, but thank you for your concern.
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Hello Chasing - thanks for visiting my haiku - I know you don't like them because I saw your comment on another haiku. That's why I taunted you, like the silly fool I am.
Yes, I agree with you that we all take different directions in our approaches to poetry; and that's a good thing.
peace to you,
BJ.
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ah that explains your visit to my work and your words.
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Autumn has always been my favorite season. 'nough said, I s'pose. 
Hope you do well in Ken's contest. Be well, Poet. Wanda
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ok then!
You are short, and sweet and right to the point! GJ
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Sounds reasonable to me!!! Who needs clothes on a hot autumn day? Very suggestive elements of nature... in more ways than one
Quite the 'aha' moment!
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SUGGESTIVE
Thanks for your awesome comments. Glad to know you enjoyed my 'aha moment'. They are difficult to come by, aren't they?
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A bit suggestive I might say. I really like it
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Thank you very much Angel - glad you like it. Yay!
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