You kiss the confetti and tar
on my scarred forehead
It feels so biblical
as you suck the communion
out of me.
I drink the seeping morphine,
a narcotic salvation,
from the hologram of your eyes
Baptize me in your serum
glistening with paranoia and phobias
Renew me in your lithium
to numb the sensation of living
and cleanse the rust I bleed
Wash away the mirage
and please lick the infection
Will you let me breathe?
I'm bleeding and the
mockingbird's crying
and the habit's a burden
and the syringe isn't working
hard enough to inject
the salt into my soul
Numb me with the therapy
clear the wounds inside of me
and put Jesus
into the scars
heal the twisted skin from which I bleed
Renew me in your lithium
to numb the sensation of living
and cleanse the rust I bleed
Wash away the mirage
and please lick the infection
Will you let me breathe?
I'm crucified on this gold
with maggots infesting my blood
I'm hanging on this needle
suffering and shattering
All you wanted was
to exile me from the mirror
You wanted to hate me,
to obliterate me
and now I stare at you
from the other side of the world
crying. This is what
I mean to you, dying
with sand down my throat
and the enemy of you in my
memory
Renew me in your lithium
to numb the sensation of living
and cleanse the rust I bleed
Wash away the mirage
and please lick the infection
Will you let me breathe?
Author notes
1. Name [Real & User]
- Nathaniel. RustInTheWound
2. Age
- 19-years-old
3. Amount of Poetic Experience
About four years.
4. Typical/Strongest Style
Free verse, abstract.
5. Unusual/Weakest Style
Lyrical (Yes, I tried to overcome that in this.)
6. Favorite Type of Inspiration
Music, particularly those songs by brilliant songwriters/artists such as Tool/A Perfect Circle, Blue October, Hurt and Evans Blue.
7. Amount of Multiround Experience
Three contests---top 6, and two top 8's I believe.
8. Some Accomplishments
See above.
9. One Fact I Don’t Know About You
I'm no longer majoring in journalism.
10. Additional Comments You’d Like Me To Read
I don't expect to win. I already know I'm not talented enough. Instead, I expect to continue to grow and learn, to build upon myself and most importantly, to have fun. Poetry, like anything, isn't about the competition for excellence. (Since, from a nihilists view, everyone dies anyway, and will be forgotten) Instead, I'd say poetry, like everything, is about constant growth, vigilance and experiences.
A contest entry
- project poetry season one [multiround contest auditions] by blackday.
300 points, ended March 21, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Hmm Nate. Let me say this: the first stanza was by far my favorite.
One of the things that really distracted me for the poem was your use of "bleeding" over & over again. I can understand for the repetition, but it really just didn't do it for me.
You did play with some of those images I've come to realize are just "Nate" things, but I just want you to know that I will be pushing you to go outside of the box & write things outside of your normal style, just to mix it up.
You're in though. Join the group. <3
http://allpoetry.com/group/info/project%20poetry
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