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Growing up

growing up a helpless child,
in this world of hate,
day in and day out,
thinking life as a horrilbe dream.
nightmares still haunt me,
in my dark, depressing dreams,
you still stalk me,
when ever your not even there.
living life as an invisible child,
hoping and wishing,
someone will open there eyes,
and see, the things growing up did to me.

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  • brokenhearted1234
    October 14

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    nasty ass bitchhhh

    lmao plz. oh im so sry u had such a bad life ): lets all feel bad for you now. plz bitch. half tht shit u made up. i got u on so many lies u aint got no idea. oh and i tlked shit bout my frineds? lmao plz. wata bout wat u always said bout brandy? how she was a skank and got on urs nerves and u didnt even like her anymore. now tht u wannna hang with aj, drew and all them bitches. now shes ur best frined. lmao! ur so fucking fake bitch. get a fucking life and stop fucking everybody in town. everyone thinks ur fucking nasty. lmao u nasty ass bitchhhhh!!!!!


  • broken-n-shattered
    January 1

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    wow

    babygirl this is amazing. i love you sooo much and you know i'm here for you if you ever need me. and if that bastard ever comes around here again i swear i'm gonna fuckin kill him. great write though.


  • morgana raven Greeters member
    December 23, 2008

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    I read this poem as if i could have written it myself. I can relate compeltly to everything you said. I read your authro page as well, and you arent alone. people in this world kinda suck really bad. its a shame considering only a handful are worth anything, anyway i thought the emotion was expressed wonderfully in this poem.
    great work, sad, but great.
    Laura.


  • Soul-Alchemist
    May 21, 2008

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    Good

    I really like the content of this poem. I think you could dwell on it a tad bit more, but great none the less! ^_^ I can totally relate to this poem though. I really like it.


  • InfiniteCaitlin
    March 16, 2008

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    Cliche...

    I like the intent of the poem. But other than that, this isnt really what I would call a great write. Maybe alot of revising could fix this. Its really plain, there is no imagery not really any litterary devices, nothing to really catch the reader. Its pretty cliche too. Maybe with some length a careful look at some detail and spacing it to the right could help this. I just re-read this trying to give it a second chance. No offense, this needs somework.

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